Feb 3rd Thursday - cat and mouse

Dulcie · 6 Feb 2016, 19:29

@mag It's great that you finally got the courage to post - welcome to the SVS community! It's a friendly place and great to share your work so I hope you keep posting too. This is a lovely idea for 3rd Thursday - I like that you have characterised the sisters as cat and mouse, to capture the fighting-but-friends part of your concept. Will be great to see how this progresses

mag · 6 Feb 2016, 23:19

@Dulcie Thank you! I have to say - this is the most friendly, yet constructive community I had the chance to be in. Just reading through various discussions helps so much!

mag · 6 Feb 2016, 23:25

Here's un update on the illustration. I am not sure about the background - it's still not finished though, so maybe I will find what bugs me after the fancy frame is done...
Any suggestions or advice will be very appreciated! I'm always happy to learn something new.

shinjifujioka · 6 Feb 2016, 23:53

I really like the soft, felt/wool-like feeling of the trees and how their clothes/costumes echo that same feeling.

I think if the more defined line work on their face (and the stitching) had more of that same organic/tactile feel it would tie the piece together even more.

Oh, also really like the color palette. It has a very gentle feel to it

mag · 6 Feb 2016, 23:57

@shinjifujioka Thank you! I will definitely take a look at that.

NoWayMe · 7 Feb 2016, 03:22

I really like this piece! I like the background, however, I would maybe try desaturating it a bit so it doesn't compete with the girls as much... Also, I agree with @shinjifujioka about having some of the organic texture on the faces. Finally, maybe you should use another color for the shadow (dark green-blue maybe?); the black is a little distracting and I think it would help to harmonize colors... even on the face you could try a "almost-black green or blue" for the details....

Can't wait to see it finish!

lmrush · 7 Feb 2016, 03:59

So sweet I especially love the little sister

MOO · 7 Feb 2016, 06:06

This is really cute I like their outfits.

mag · 13 Feb 2016, 23:17

Thank you all for your advices! I tried to applied them and here's the finished illustration.
But - While I was drawing this one, another idea came up. Now I do not know which one of them should I send...
I already have the values and color palette done, ready to color the whole thing.

Any ideas?

NoWayMe · 13 Feb 2016, 23:30

Hahahaha!!! I LOVE the comic! I really don't know which one you should submit. You have very solid skills.

mag · 14 Feb 2016, 00:48

@NoWayMe Thank you.

shinjifujioka · 14 Feb 2016, 00:55

I really like the comic as well!

Leontine · 15 Feb 2016, 09:35

love the Comic, its so funny, and nicely designed!

mag · 15 Feb 2016, 19:56

Thank you all! I will go with the comic then. I found really helpful the comic class by Jake Parker. I know I still did not draw quite right this page, but I sure will learn. It's funny how much more easily the work can be done, once I come to know the principles.

mag · 15 Feb 2016, 22:28

And here's the final version with color. What do you thing? Any suggestions?
Thank you all for your advices and comments!

Camomilla · 16 Feb 2016, 11:24

Your cartoon is adorable The only thing I don't like about it is that the cat calls the fox an "ingorant twit" - but then again, perhaps that's what a cat WOULD say I love the way you use panels and the characters reads very well!

mag · 16 Feb 2016, 14:35

@Camomilla Yeah... I know, it's quite rough to call someone that way and I was also thinking about it, if it's appropriate. But then again, this comic is not supposed for little kids and cats sometimes are unscrupulous - and lovely and warm and cute and the same time.
Would it be better if the cat says: "you little twit" instead? Or something else? I still want the cat to say something a little offensive. But I do not want to go vulgar too much.

Camomilla · 16 Feb 2016, 15:07

I would think the cat would be condescending, like "it's LOVE, you wouldn't know anything about it" - or something - IMPLYING he's an ignorant twat, without saying it out loud. If that makes sence

Rich Green · 16 Feb 2016, 15:53

@mag - really like the personality you were able to capture in your characters. The way the girl is marching along to the spot where she is going to place the food down - is something I can really see a kid doing and it is those small details that really help sell this entire thing. I really love the line work as well. Very nicely done!

Lynn Larson · 16 Feb 2016, 19:31

@mag I like ignorant twit hehe. I don't think it's vulgar at all, and if it isn't really intended for kids, then it is just fine