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    Feb 3rd Thursday - cat and mouse

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    • shinjifujioka
      shinjifujioka SVS OG last edited by

      I really like the soft, felt/wool-like feeling of the trees and how their clothes/costumes echo that same feeling.

      I think if the more defined line work on their face (and the stitching) had more of that same organic/tactile feel it would tie the piece together even more.

      Oh, also really like the color palette. It has a very gentle feel to it 🙂

      shinjifujioka.com
      https://www.facebook.com/shinjifujiokaart
      IG: @shinjifujiokastudio

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      • mag
        mag Pro SVS OG @shinjifujioka last edited by

        @shinjifujioka Thank you! I will definitely take a look at that. 🙂

        Mag
        https://www.instagram.com/mag_takac/
        http://mag.takac.name

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        • NoWayMe
          NoWayMe last edited by

          I really like this piece! I like the background, however, I would maybe try desaturating it a bit so it doesn't compete with the girls as much... Also, I agree with @shinjifujioka about having some of the organic texture on the faces. Finally, maybe you should use another color for the shadow (dark green-blue maybe?); the black is a little distracting and I think it would help to harmonize colors... even on the face you could try a "almost-black green or blue" for the details....

          Can't wait to see it finish!

          noemiegionetlandry.squarespace.com
          noemie_illustration on Instagram

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          • lmrush
            lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

            So sweet I especially love the little sister

            Lisa Rush
            www.lisarushgallery.com
            www.facebook.com/ArtbyLisaRush/
            www.instagram.com/lisarush11/

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            • MOO
              MOO SVS OG last edited by

              This is really cute 🙂 I like their outfits.

              Marsha Ottum Owen

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              • mag
                mag Pro SVS OG last edited by

                Thank you all for your advices! I tried to applied them and here's the finished illustration.
                But - While I was drawing this one, another idea came up. Now I do not know which one of them should I send...
                I already have the values and color palette done, ready to color the whole thing. feb03.jpg
                comic01.jpg
                Any ideas?

                Mag
                https://www.instagram.com/mag_takac/
                http://mag.takac.name

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                • NoWayMe
                  NoWayMe last edited by

                  Hahahaha!!! I LOVE the comic! I really don't know which one you should submit. You have very solid skills.

                  noemiegionetlandry.squarespace.com
                  noemie_illustration on Instagram

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                  • mag
                    mag Pro SVS OG @NoWayMe last edited by mag

                    @NoWayMe Thank you. 🙂

                    Mag
                    https://www.instagram.com/mag_takac/
                    http://mag.takac.name

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                    • shinjifujioka
                      shinjifujioka SVS OG last edited by

                      I really like the comic as well!

                      shinjifujioka.com
                      https://www.facebook.com/shinjifujiokaart
                      IG: @shinjifujiokastudio

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                      • Leontine
                        Leontine last edited by

                        love the Comic, its so funny, and nicely designed!

                        Leontine
                        "A picture is worth a thousand words."

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                        • mag
                          mag Pro SVS OG last edited by

                          Thank you all! I will go with the comic then. I found really helpful the comic class by Jake Parker. I know I still did not draw quite right this page, but I sure will learn. 🙂 It's funny how much more easily the work can be done, once I come to know the principles.

                          Mag
                          https://www.instagram.com/mag_takac/
                          http://mag.takac.name

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                          • mag
                            mag Pro SVS OG last edited by

                            And here's the final version with color. 🙂 What do you thing? Any suggestions?
                            Thank you all for your advices and comments! 🙂comic02.jpg

                            Mag
                            https://www.instagram.com/mag_takac/
                            http://mag.takac.name

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                            • Camomilla
                              Camomilla last edited by

                              Your cartoon is adorable ❤ The only thing I don't like about it is that the cat calls the fox an "ingorant twit" - but then again, perhaps that's what a cat WOULD say 🙂 I love the way you use panels and the characters reads very well!

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                              • mag
                                mag Pro SVS OG @Camomilla last edited by

                                @Camomilla Yeah... I know, it's quite rough to call someone that way and I was also thinking about it, if it's appropriate. But then again, this comic is not supposed for little kids and cats sometimes are unscrupulous - and lovely and warm and cute and the same time. 🙂
                                Would it be better if the cat says: "you little twit" instead? Or something else? I still want the cat to say something a little offensive. But I do not want to go vulgar too much.

                                Mag
                                https://www.instagram.com/mag_takac/
                                http://mag.takac.name

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                                • Camomilla
                                  Camomilla last edited by

                                  I would think the cat would be condescending, like "it's LOVE, you wouldn't know anything about it" - or something - IMPLYING he's an ignorant twat, without saying it out loud. If that makes sence 😛 🙂

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                                  • Rich Green
                                    Rich Green SVS OG @mag last edited by

                                    @mag - really like the personality you were able to capture in your characters. The way the girl is marching along to the spot where she is going to place the food down - is something I can really see a kid doing and it is those small details that really help sell this entire thing. I really love the line work as well. Very nicely done!

                                    www.richgreenart.com instagram.com/richgreenart/

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                                    • Lynn Larson
                                      Lynn Larson SVS OG @mag last edited by

                                      @mag I like ignorant twit hehe. I don't think it's vulgar at all, and if it isn't really intended for kids, then it is just fine 🙂

                                      https://instagram.com/lynnlarsonart/
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                                      • lmrush
                                        lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                        Your comic looks so professional- way to go!!!! Thank you for sharing

                                        Lisa Rush
                                        www.lisarushgallery.com
                                        www.facebook.com/ArtbyLisaRush/
                                        www.instagram.com/lisarush11/

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