Portfolio piece critique: Feedback wanted!
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@Stephanie-H Thank you!!
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Update
Keep fiddling around with poses and gestures, and formulating what goats in the kitchen might create in reactions from all the relatives and guests at the party! My idea is the goats got out of their pen and wandered into the kitchen without anyone noticing and ruined the cake, cupcakes and causing general mayhem. Mom and Grandma just walked in and found them. It's the boy's birthday and he's pretty butthurt but what is he gonna do? Little sister is tattling, and I thought about adding a little kid sitting on the floor eating a cupcake.
Can you make sense of the story here? Trying to finish up planning this out so I can finish it...Erin Richardson
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@ArtistErin I definitely like this last version the kids gesture/pose and expression are chefs kiss perfect.
I do think the left side of the comp is a bit busy though I think you could remove an adult and it would work better in my opinion.
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@ArtistErin I agree with Asya, if you remove 1 adult it'll read better! Super cute illo so far.
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@ArtistErin oh man, we just had a bear in our yard a few days ago! I went out to see what the dogs were barking at, thinking it was a squirrel or something, but it was a bear in the tree.
My suggestion is to make the bear a little more stylized like the kid. This one looks like it’s more on the realism side - in which case, this would be a terrifying situation. I can tell you’re not going for that. If it’s a friendly/ curious bear encounter, maybe doing something gesture wise that is cuter… like the head tilt that dogs do or something? -
@Pamela-Fraley Yeah you have a point! Thank you!!!
I have been binge watching Aaron Blaise sketching and painting, noticing a ton of flaws in my expressions. Definitely helpful I feel like I need to keep each character consistent in style. Sometimes my realism background comes through too strong in ways. I love the looseness of character animation concepts yet I don't like things to look too cartoon-like, it's the happy middle ground I am struggling to find.
Anyway, thanks again... will post again soon.
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@Pamela-Fraley I do like this idea better
Erin Richardson
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@ArtistErin I instantly like that better! He’s super cute. And, that made him look way less threatening to me. Im terrified of bears. Haha! Good thing I live in Alaska.
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@Pamela-Fraley Thank you Pamela! Eyes are feeling the strain as I try to keep plugging away at developing my portfolio. I'll be posting the link soon...
I would be afraid of bears too if they showed up in my yard! I used to take care of 170 animals at a private animal sanctuary and I encountered a mad pig, a mad bull, and a very unhappy rooster however no bears!! Yikes!!!
Alaska is gorgeous!!! I hope to travel there someday
