does this work? composition and value... edit: back to the start! composition thumbnails

[lmrush]

My favorite is the one posted three days ago with close up of Mrs. Mouse to the right carrying in tea. Your characters are so sweet

[audrey dowling]

now, I'm done with the values.
overall, much better than the 1st illustration, I think, I'm quite happy with it so far
let me know what you think please

[Russ Van Dine]

I love your art. Very good, clean, emotional... Now I want to know who is coming through the door. If the door is closed the two mice are the focal point...

[audrey dowling]

@Russ-Van-Dine the text will be in the door and Mrs Mouse came through this door. so I'm thinking it's a focal point that has a justification (+ lighting): the reader might read the text first, then look at the image and see the characters in the actual image

[Russ Van Dine]

@audrey-dowling Nice, hadn't thought of that... love the lamp!

[audrey dowling]

or maybe this would be better?
(God, I can't believe I'm changing it AGAIN! )

[audrey dowling]

"delicous"...

[audrey dowling]

line and values done, hopefully for the last time!

[jacs]

@audrey-dowling it's beautiful x

[audrey dowling]

thank you @jacs