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    Some painting for my Personal Project Book Dragons - Feedback very Welcome

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    • kai satoshi
      kai satoshi last edited by

      Here are the Paintings. I've included the full image as well as the bleed and gutter version. Feedback is welcome and appreciated :). This is for a poetry book I am working on Called "Dragons". Thanks for taking a look :)! I posted some sketches here previously if interested:
      http://forum.svslearn.com/topic/2697/book-cover-for-my-createspace-book-i-have-begun-to-work-on/14

      The Cover

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      • Eric Castleman
        Eric Castleman last edited by

        I love the art style, and everything almost looks perfect in my opinion (I'm a novice though) however, my one critique is the dragon on the boat. The color of the boat and the dragon almost blend into each other. Besides that, I think it is really good.

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        • kai satoshi
          kai satoshi @Eric Castleman last edited by

          @Eric-Castleman thank you eric.... I have been thinking of changing his color... maybe to green. not sure though. lol. Thanks 🙂

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          • Rich Green
            Rich Green SVS OG @kai satoshi last edited by

            @kai-satoshi I love how that cover design turned out! Wow so awesome! Great job!

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            • kai satoshi
              kai satoshi @Rich Green last edited by

              @Rich-Green Thanks Rich 🙂

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              • evilrobot
                evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                This is awesome. Looks really nice. Congrats.

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                • Kelly Lane
                  Kelly Lane @kai satoshi last edited by

                  @kai-satoshi looks great I really like your work on the octopus, also really like your treatment of the water.

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                  • Jodi Gregg
                    Jodi Gregg last edited by

                    @kai-satoshi Your colors in the first 2 are amazing! As pointed out, the dragon on the boat and octopus need a little more contrast -not sure if it's a value or color problem - to separate them from the background. Love the textures as well! Keep up the great work!

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                    • kai satoshi
                      kai satoshi @Jodi Gregg last edited by

                      @girlgregg @evilrobot @Rich Green

                      Sorry it's taken me a while to get back on here :(. Thanks for the feedback! I've started working on the dragon on the boat along with other issues in the picture. I'll post the revised version when done 🙂

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                      • mattramsey
                        mattramsey @kai satoshi last edited by

                        @kai-satoshi these are really cool.

                        I love the baseball eye on the kid's dragon costume!

                        minor crit: the dragon on the boat's arm is a little awkward--it's almost more human like than dragon like.

                        but really nice work!

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                          Tyler Blake last edited by

                          Awesome! I love the way the boat casts a shadow in the water!

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                          • kai satoshi
                            kai satoshi @Tyler Blake last edited by

                            @Tyler-Blake Thanks Tyler 🙂

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                            • kai satoshi
                              kai satoshi last edited by

                              I took a break from working on the Dragon in the boat so I could come back to it with fresh eyes. Here is the next one I've been working on. As Always... Critiques are welcome. Thanks!

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                              • kai satoshi
                                kai satoshi @kai satoshi last edited by

                                Revised

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                                • Nazuba
                                  Nazuba @kai satoshi last edited by

                                  @kai-satoshi Loving your work, Kai. In this piece though, if the yellow light is so bright behind the little creature, it should come over (like wrap around) the creature just a little bit since he is a rounded form. Also, some light should bounce from the mat into his face. Just some out of context feedback based on the light, I am not sure what you intended on this piece.

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                                  • kai satoshi
                                    kai satoshi @Nazuba last edited by kai satoshi

                                    @Nazuba Wonderful points! Because of the lighting setup, I have to admit I am struggling on the dragon to make his values contrast to the light behind him. I'm definitely going to attempt what you are suggesting but I am fighting the dragon being dark (value) to the light being light (value). When I begin adding light to him to wrap around I end up killing the contrast. UG! 😞 lol. But I will definitely continue to mess with it to see if I can make it work. 🙂

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                                    • kai satoshi
                                      kai satoshi last edited by kai satoshi

                                      revised again 🙂 On this one I changed the values around so I could get more lighting on the dragon. So instead of the cave being lighting and the dragon darker I flip flopped it and made the dragon lighter and the cave darker.

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                                      • Joy Heyer
                                        Joy Heyer last edited by

                                        I'm loving these illustrations! I do feel you could make more of a gradation in the cave mouth. It kind-of looks like the dragon has a heavenly halo rather than back lit. Also, the moon seems a little too close to the edges of the image. And, though I don't know that it matters, would not be that shape unless there was a solar eclipse. I suggest making it smaller, tweaking it's shape, and moving it away from the edges more. All in all it is beautiful rendering. I love the style!

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                                        • kai satoshi
                                          kai satoshi @Joy Heyer last edited by

                                          @Joy-Heyer Thanks Joy. Been working on that illustration for a bit. Especially the gradation :). Thank you for the critique 🙂

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                                          • kai satoshi
                                            kai satoshi last edited by

                                            Here is another image I've been working on. Was planning on leaving the background white/no background. Anyway here it is. 🙂

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