Dummy book new spreads
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I think this is really cool. The font is not my personal taste but overall very nice work.
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Great work @evilrobot ! Definitely good art for a children's book. Nicely done : )
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Thank you very much. Here is the next spread. I'm one third of the way through....just might finish this thing.
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love your character and little dog
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@lmrush Thank you very much. Here's my next rough spread for my dummy book.
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Beautiful!
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great spread!
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Thank you. Here's my next rough spread.
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Everything is good but this last one is really super fun! Great contrast of words and images!
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@evilrobot William these are my favorite so far! - i have a thought about the last three images though - i think we as adults are not too shocked by cartoon cannibalism but i am wondering what age group this is targeting - i'm picturing my 5 year old asking " are they going to eat that boy?" and me wondering what to say because they clearly are hoping at least to eat the boy and his little dog - anyways - i really love the ironic relationship between the words and drawings...and i love the drawing themselves - really nice!
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Thanks for the input. I can see your point. When I was thinking this up I was remembering the old Warner Bothers cartoons and all the wacky violence they use to have in them. I guess it makes a difference because you can get away with a lot more if you are using anthropomorphized animal characters. But then you did have Yosemite Sam and Elmer Fudd and they'd always get crazy things done to them...even shot in the face. I guess my thinking was as long as the characters get out unharmed that it wouldn't be too violent for kids. (although yeah you don't want your kids thinking about getting eaten) Also seems to me kids are lot more grown up in this age. They know about a lot more bad things than a lot of us knew when we were little....not sure if this will be an issue or not? I guess I'm not really sure what age range I'm going for either...It might be too simple of art and text for older kids and too violent for younger kids...?
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Hi @evilrobot ! I really enjoy following your spreads here.
To the last two I have to say that my first reaction was: Oh boy, this is shocking. But after you explained I see your intention. It is hard to say how kids will react, particularly because it depends on the kids personalities how they will take it.
But I want to bring up something else what bothered me about the last two. The former spreads were made from the boys perspective. So the hints you give are illustrated in a way that the boy should follow these hints. But now the perspective changed. You say, don't forget to eat, but the boy himself is going to be (almost) eaten. To me this is somehow a break in the concept. You know what I mean?
About the age goup, I would say, because it is only a few lines of text, it is rather for younger kids, who are guided by an adult through the book. I agree that the age discussion is difficult.
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@Jana Thank you for your critique. I understand what you are saying. I'll have to think about it for a while and revisit the text. I actually had several variations on the text for this page. My first idea was to have the text say something about trying different foods when you are in foreign cultures but I couldn't figure out the text for children and I would have ended up with the same problem .Thanks for your input I'll have to revisit this when I get the illustrations done. I'm hoping I can get it good enough for an agent to see my vision for the book and if I get signed have them help me with the writing.
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Here's the next spread. I used my hand writing to make a font (as per the SVS class on graphic novels showed a great place to do that) I think it works better. I may also go back on the colored pieces and re- ink them at about half the line thickness when I'm done with all the spreads.
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@evilrobot Beautiful!
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@evilrobot I like it! Haha funny spread too.
Your text is a lot better with your on hand writing. I'd say you might want to "beef up" the small a and i though, they're pretty light (the entire i, with the a it's only the upper curve that's thin/light).
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Looking sweet. I like your style.
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@evilrobot This looks great William - i keep thinking it would be a great opportunity between these two panels to see how they are able to free themselves from the rotisserie while underwater - maybe the use of a razor clam or a swordfish (i know they did not land in the ocean but you get the idea).. somehow working a couple of underwater scenes into the story along with your ironic wit would be super fun....just a thought
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This looks so fun! Nice and witty throughout. I was also wondering how did they free themselves from the ropes? That is the kind of things my son would immediately point out....
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Thanks for the feedback....I was thinking the ropes loosened up when they fell off the cliff into the water...but, looks like I need to come up with a better solution... I could make the image on the one page smaller and add a couple more spots to flesh out the story, I'll add it to my notes. Thanks. Here's the next spread.
