Treehouse Tea Party, Feedback Appreciated
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Super cute. I really love this image, and the colors are so fun! I was a little surprised by the purple leaves, but I'm sure that was intentional. It does seem weird to me that the green on the underside of the treehouse is so saturated. It seems to me like the underside should be less saturated since it's in shadow, and then the roof more saturated where the sun is hitting. Maybe?
Another comment that I wish I could have given earler is that the composition seems very left-heavy--text, bird, house, and squirrel are all on the left side. This jumped out at me more in the colored version, I think that saturated green might be making it seem even more lop-sided. Maybe something as small and simple as putting the bird on the right side instead of the left could fix that.
As before, I love your lines, and the textures are awesome as well--it reminds me a little bit of The Secret of Kells, if you've seen that movie. Keep up the good work!
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Here's the update.
@Lynn-Larson, Thanks for your suggestions. I had so much fun doing the feather boa. I was excited about the tutu on the one with her bottom up in the air, but I'm not sure if it's working. Any thoughts on how I could tweak it? Right now, I'm worried it looks like the boa pig is sniffing her, and I'm not sure if the tutu looks transparent enough.
@Naroth-Kean Thank you for continuing to push me. I darkened the bump (I don't know if there is an English word for that!). And I worked on the clouds more. That was really tough for me; I think my next personal assignment is going to be pages of skies that express light and depth.
@SarahLuAnn Thank you for this detailed feedback. I'm so glad you said something about the green. Something about it wasn't working for me, and I couldn't figure out what. I ended up using a desaturated yellow for the base and desaturating the green under the roof a bit as well.
I spent a ton of time trying to shift some of the weight of the image to the right. What I ended up with was subtle (toned down the duck, darkened the tree trunk and used the boa to gesture right). Does that change your impression at all? Oh, and I moved the next. Not sure how I feel about that one.
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I love those extra accessories you gave them! awesome. The sky read much deeper and the movement/flow are much better. Also like your text over there too. easier to read and you know where it is right away.
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I do think the image is more balanced now, and the treehouse looks better without the bright green on the bottom. I think the text is more readable and easier to find too. Awesome job!
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love it! love the extra's as well. Good job!
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I would change the color of the ladder to pop a little.
Never give up, always push yourself two steps further than you believe you can go.
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Trim it down a bit by the nose to remove the sniffing aspect. Tangent lol. Add a bit of brown to it, where it would be the bottom of the ruffle, same color as the trunk to give it a bit of transparency, and a little bit of blue and green (very little!) to give it an iridescent look. The boa looks like it was fun hehe
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@Steve-Young Thanks. I'll play around with that before I print this one out for my portfolio.
@Naroth-Kean @Sarah-LuAnn @Leontine-Gaasenbeek and everybody else who helped me throughout this piece. Thank you so much!
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@Lynn-Larson Thanks for the tutu tips
I'll definitely give that a bit more attention.The boa was so fun. Those are silhouettes of photographs of feathers that I made into a photoshop brush based on some of what I learned in Lee's Chaos to Control class.
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awesome!! that's one i haven't had a chance to watch yet
watching Jim Madsen's now
