Creative Composition- 25 Things WIP
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The tent is better but now the salamander is smaller, which now again makes it out of proportion. I'd ease on the curve of the back and bring the size of it up again. I'd also move the squirrel up over to the left on the tree branch a bit. The three things in the picture make a straight line, girl, squirrel, salamander, and I'd stagger them to make the composition look more natural.
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It seemed less obvious when the salamander was partially covered in the leaves.
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Ok, worked on it more, taking your suggestions in mind. Still playing with the look of the squirrel and salamander and might tweak the anatomy of the girl. I thought I tweaked the arch of the salamander's back, but I must have got my layers mixed up.
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@TessW I love it there's so many little details and things to look at but the main focus still reads really well! I think you've done a great job with all the changes
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Overall, I really like how this has changed from the beginning of the thread, but... If I might add my 2 cents...
I know this has mainly been about the values and all, but the thing that has really stuck out to me are the binoculars she is using. As close as she is to the action, binoculars aren't really needed. Maybe turn them into a camera.
also, it seems as if you added more detail to the background around the tent and cliff & bridge areas. To me, the bridge area work better with less detail, letting us know what is there, but not distracting from the foreground action. And the raccoon in the tree and rabbit(?) in the pot by the tent seem to distract as well. Not sure if you needed those to get to the 25 things, but they seem unnecessary to the story at large. Also, those clothes on the tent, again, add too much busy-ness.
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Well, it's been a while since I worked on this piece. I was intimidated to start rendering, so I let it sit for a while. Coming back to it, I've played with the drawing a bit. Is there a version you like better?
@ambiirae Thanks!
@tombarrettillo said in Creative Composition- 25 Things WIP:
Overall, I really like how this has changed from the beginning of the thread, but... If I might add my 2 cents...
I know this has mainly been about the values and all, but the thing that has really stuck out to me are the binoculars she is using. As close as she is to the action, binoculars aren't really needed. Maybe turn them into a camera.
also, it seems as if you added more detail to the background around the tent and cliff & bridge areas. To me, the bridge area work better with less detail, letting us know what is there, but not distracting from the foreground action. And the raccoon in the tree and rabbit(?) in the pot by the tent seem to distract as well. Not sure if you needed those to get to the 25 things, but they seem unnecessary to the story at large. Also, those clothes on the tent, again, add too much busy-ness.
Thank you Tom! I guess I have a soft spot for little kids using binoculars. Have you ever noticed how they love playing with them to make them feel adventurous, even if they are totally using them wrong? I took your advice though, and tried some different options.
As far as the busy-ness goes, I hope to resolve that in the rendering stage. The spirit of the assignment is that you can have a lot of things going on in the piece, but you can still establish the focal points with color, values, textures,, etc. I will try to de-emphasize the areas you mentioned with less detail and contrast.
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@tessw defenietly 1st one! I like their eye contact;)
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@aska said in Creative Composition- 25 Things WIP:
@tessw defenietly 1st one! I like their eye contact;)
w or x? The one on the left or right? Sorry, just making sure we're on the same page.
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I like "x" better than the others.
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@aska its W
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This is amazing work, and I can't wait to see the final result. However I am going to go with Y out of the last 4 you have posted here, mostly because I like the girl looking away. It just makes me wonder what else there is too see. But that is just me.
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@tessw If you want to highlight the girl and squirrel while it is evening, I think that A or B work best. C zones in on the squirrel. The last two don't feel separated enough from the rest of the composition, the emphasis seems to be more on the end of the log..oh wait! It's the squirrel and the salamander so, I choose E. The rest of them, the salamander doesn't stand out much at all.
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I vote for X, but with a camera. : )
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@tombarrettillo excellent idea
I was struggling trying to imagine what it was that the lil girl could be doing to better tell a story The net made more sense for butterflies and the binoculars more so for something not as close and enclosed. I think the camera concept nails it! I think it's a great concept. -
Thanks everyone! I tried it with a camera. There were a lot of possibilities when it came to camera types. What do you think?
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@tessw you could try one with phone(camera) held a little away from her face (you could then see her expression looking into the screen and her face could be slightly lit from the phone screen)
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@tessw Hi Tess,
I'm super late to this thread so take my comments with the whole shaker of salt
I liked this original comp sketch a little better since you utilize the space a little more efficiently. The girl overlaps the tent - perfect! Also in this first one the emphasis is on the salamander. I'd make it even bigger to create a little more depth. Overall I think this is going to be really fun to paint!
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@tyson-ranes said in Creative Composition- 25 Things WIP:
see her expression looking into the screen and her face could be slightly lit from the phone screen)
I love it!
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@Will-Terry Wow, thanks for taking the time to help me out- really appreciate it!
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@tessw looking very good! Nice composition!
