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    • Lydia M
      Lydia M last edited by

      You can go a lot bolder with this. I just duplicated the image and changed the top to a vivid light blending mode. It darkened and brightened the areas. I'm not say that's the technique you should use to change it, because you'd have to flatten the whole image but it's just to show that it needs more contrast. And watch out for the airbrush. Your shadows are very blurry and kind of "fuzzing off" the edges of your subjects. It's making it all murky. Lee told me that cast shadows are 2 shades darker than the local color and they have harder edges. Form shadows are soft.

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      • bharris
        bharris last edited by

        @gimmehummus I figured that once I started really laying on the color it would saturate it and I'd play with the brightness, but you're so right. I'll deepen those cast shadows. It a little hard with all the light sources to know how dark to go.

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        • Bobby Aquitania
          Bobby Aquitania last edited by Bobby Aquitania

          That window is so bright now, the kids look like they're about to be War of the Worlds vaporized! BWWWAAANGGHHH!!!
          Just kidding... the jewel tones in the sleigh are nice though, I would keep that for sure.

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          • Lydia M
            Lydia M last edited by

            Naughty kids get vaporized in the presence of Christmas magic. Lol.

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            • Kevin Longueil
              Kevin Longueil SVS OG @bharris last edited by

              @bharris This is such a nice piece! - one thing that I would say critique wise is that the focal point is going to be in the gutter of the book - I think too that it may be a little crowded in the space between Santa and the sleigh - would it be worth looking at to move Santa's side of the composition to the left a bit? - possibly bringing the little girl that is sticking her tongue out to the left also - the other thing I was wondering is about Santa's eye - will he get an eye?.....I think not having the eye leaves the image too open to projections - if you can define Santa's attitude for us it would remove the tension I feel there - for me I want him to be good natured and twinkly eyed in his attitude...but this may not be your intent ....he may be upbraiding the children...not sure though - anyways I really like your piece and it does look good the way it is 🙂

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              • bharris
                bharris last edited by

                @Kevin-Longueil I will add an eye on Santa!Thank you! I realize now that those areas were too close, and it'd be easy to make larger if it was going into a book, but I really don't want to try to move those layers this late in the game.... laziness...

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                • bharris
                  bharris last edited by

                  I've brightened the colors a lot and tried to warm up the lights. I still have to go over the details and highlights to really paint and define things. Is this working alright? I'm trying not to wash things out with color (I'm a color person anyway) and have a few good focal points across the page.

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                    • Cali Ward
                      Cali Ward last edited by

                      Best idea ever!!!

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                      • bharris
                        bharris last edited by

                        brittanyharris.jpg

                        All done and sent!

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                        • Stephanie Hider
                          Stephanie Hider last edited by

                          Love your lighting! All of it is so wonderful 🙂

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                          • Chip Valecek
                            Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @bharris last edited by

                            @bharris Looks fantastic!


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                            • Rich Green
                              Rich Green SVS OG @bharris last edited by

                              @bharris Really nice work! Your concept was so clever from the start and to now see it completed with the nice cool and warms tones and lighting - really nicely done! Best of luck tonight and congrats on such a great piece!

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                              • bharris
                                bharris last edited by

                                @Stephanie-Hider @Chip-Valecek and @Rich-Green Thank you for your comments! It was a struggle, but worth it!

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                                • Rob Smith
                                  Rob Smith last edited by

                                  @bharris Really nice. I was super excited to see the finished image. I'm sure they will have a few suggestions for you tonight but I'm hoping your one of the winners!

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                                  • bharris
                                    bharris last edited by

                                    @Rob-Smith I hope they do! It was my first time using this method and I'd like to improve on it.

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                                    • Dulcie
                                      Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

                                      @bharris I agree with the other comments - a really beautiful piece. There are so many great works entered this month but I wouldn't be surprised at all to see this one critiqued tonight!

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                                      • bharris
                                        bharris last edited by

                                        It was fun to watch and participate! This piece didn't get a critique, so I'd love to hear some thoughts. I already see things that could have used more time.

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                                        • DanetteDraws
                                          DanetteDraws last edited by DanetteDraws

                                          @bharris I haven't watched last night's critique yet to know who won and how they stack up to yours, but I can offer some feedback 🙂

                                          What I think you're strong in:

                                          • concept
                                          • composition
                                          • line drawing/sketch (the only thing I think is "off" is Santa's face - I feel like he's missing a round cheek rather than having a flat face that immediately goes into a big nose. His eye might be too high/inset too much too.)

                                          What I think you can work on:

                                          • Colour
                                          • Rendering

                                          To expand on these... you have some nice vibrant colours in there, but mostly I think it's quite muddy. I think it's the snow in particular that's off to me - for one, it should be more white than yellow (the snow on the ground in the foreground), and in the shadows not so grey/slush-like. I think it would be helpful for you to refer to some reference imagery of snow in a nighttime scene. I also think the overall colour harmony is off - the deep red feels out of place against the blue you chose for the sky.

                                          In terms of rendering - do you use the airbrush at all? For me, it looks a bit "mushy". I'd work on adding some nice textures and maybe using brushes with texture right in them.

                                          Anyway, hope this helps! I think you're off to a good start though and perhaps next month you'll get a critique 🙂

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                                          • bharris
                                            bharris last edited by

                                            @DanetteDraws Thank you for that. I really don't like Santa's face much either... And I agree the sky color is defiantly off. This was my first time doing a night-time and snow and this particular rendering style. Thank you for your suggestions and I appreciate your feedback!

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