Idea Sketch: feedback appreciated
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I really love the concept and I think that the message comes across beautifully. I like the lay out and the design. I think (but this is just me) it would be nice having the character in the first window watering the flower pot, or something like that, to communicate the hope that things will be nice and beautiful again.
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Thank you @jdubz @phoenix-yip @Simonpeterpaul for your feedback, it was really good and helpful. Since everyone seems to agree that moving the reaper a bit to the left might be a good idea, I will try that and see what it looks like. I will look into the expressions and the watering can idea. It might be fun if the last person was still happily looking at his flowers unaware that they will be cut down shortly. The people in the picture cannot see the reaper (he is invisible unless you are dead or dying). They are looking at the flowers like "hey.... where are my flowers...."
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Made a few alterations to the sketch.
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What a super neat idea!
I love the addition of the woman with the watering can. And opening the window on the right. It makes me want the middle guy to have something too... a cat? A book? A pipe? A spilling cup of tea?
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@hakepe I really love this illustration already! Such an awesome concept. The only thing I notice is that the characters in the windows all blend into the background value wise. I'm thinking that is intentional; as not to bring too much focus on them, but I thought I would put that out there just in case you wanted them to pop out slightly from the background. I love your grim reaper character!
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@hakepe Ohh yeah I really like where that took it. I think the only thing I wish I could see more was the expression of the middle guy. I don't know if I'd sacrifice his shape though - the tapered mouth is really dynamic. Maybe its just the line weight that could be thinned out so we could see it better?
I agree with @Jacy13 - I wasn't sure if this was the final values version. Since the reaper is the only dark thing on the entire piece, I'd say if you darkened the areas behind the characters on the inside that would really pop everyone off the page and create a lot more dynamic range.
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I would add way more drooping flowers to hit us over the head with the trail of death idea.
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@hakepe I really love it, so so much.
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Thank you everyone for your feedback and advice. This is what I ended up with.
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This a great piece! I love the death design and the colors are really good.
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Ohhh I really love that you made that little one distracting with that butterfly, something like he didn't even notice that he is cutting all the flowers, that makes his so Innocent and cute, also I love that you end up changing the position of the old woman cause the 3 in the first sketch looks like statues, really a lovely work x3
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Thank you @K-Flagg . I am glad that adding the butterfly gave the effect that I wanted @Mari1-9Munive This character is starting to have a life of it's own in my head, I think I am going to make some more paintings with him, maybe even a story or a comic. I have a couple of ideas in mind.
