My Rabbit Road Race WIP

KevinTreaccar

@Patricia-Dishmon Thank you for this assessment. Glass breaking moment if you know How I Met Your Mother.

I have a writer-first background and I’m definitely trying to fit too much. One of my other thumbnails was multiple moments on the same page. Probably says the moment was too complicated.

AngelinaKizz

I think you need to show that he took a short cut better.... tracks off the road, veering through the terrain, over the wood bridge and across the finish line. Maybe a sleeping flag waving tortoise that didn't see the cheat...

ArtMelC

I think if you want to stick with the shortcut idea, some more obvious imagery that screams "shortcut" would be:

Tire tracks on grass
The car is in the water itself (maybe the river is shallow) though in real life that would totally wreck the old truck
Swing across in a flying fox or just tarzan-style lol

KevinTreaccar

Working on a new character and story instead now…

KevinTreaccar

Now I need to watch the adding backgrounds class ASAP.

KathrynAdebayo

@KevinTreaccar Great design!

KevinTreaccar

@KathrynAdebayo Thank you!

KevinTreaccar

Working on sketching out (and toning obviously) the middle ground and background right now.

A) See any sketch issues I really need to fix?
B ) Any ideas on what you want to see in that field space? I’m constantly bouncing between a bunny burrow home, bunny burrow homes, a carrot field and more.
C) Why can I never make up my mind?

kirsten-mcg

@KevinTreaccar I love this new concept you've come up with! The story is simple, and much more clear. Of your three ideas above, my vote would be for a bunny burrow home. You could have so much fun designing what a bunny's house would look like! But you might want to consider how your background would further the story you are trying to tell. For example: if you decide to make it a bunny home, maybe the story you are telling could be about a little bunny trying to race against his big brother. You could change up the racetrack a bit to give it more of a homemade feel. Just ask yourself lots of questions about these characters and why they are racing and see what you come up with!

Asyas_illos

@KevinTreaccar much better I think! I like carrot patch…

Griffin McPherson

@KevinTreaccar I think the idea of small vs huge could work but the composition could be pushed. If you have a simple and straightforward idea you want to make sure you really push the composition. The truck is huge and intimidating and the car is small and feels weak in comparison. This is obvious to the viewer so how could you make it more interesting to the viewer? What is an angle that could emphasize those ideas?

KevinTreaccar

Shading and lighting (hopefully) tonight. Then I try and see if I push it and finish it in time before my vacation that’s pushing up my deadline by a week.

Asyas_illos

@KevinTreaccar it’s coming along nicely!

KevinTreaccar

@Griffin Thanks. That all makes perfect sense. When I switched concepts, I definitely did things way out of order – not a smooth transition – and I’m noticing issues due to that. Mostly in the composition space.

Still a good learning experience. If I can’t get your suggested pushed version done in time, I still plan to try to work on it in August.

KevinTreaccar

@Asyas_illos Thank you!

KevinTreaccar

KevinTreaccar

Which do you find most compelling? A, B or C?

A.

B.

C.

Or maybe some hybrid of A+C or B+C because I screwed up the clouds?

Griffin McPherson

@KevinTreaccar I think the sunny day look with A is best though some clouds could add some interest and I would also recommend making the hills darker because they’re a similar value to the clouds

kirsten-mcg

@KevinTreaccar The clouds definitely lend an ominous feel to the piece. I would go with them if that's what you're going for. The sunny day (A) feels lighter though, if you're wanting to keep the mood a little lighter.

Sarah VanDam

Hey, just read through all this. I like it! It’s a simple, clear concept. I have just a couple ideas in case you have time to implement them (I hope you have a great vacation!). One, I’d just darken some of the shadows, and sharpen the edges, at least towards the base of the objects they extend from, like the tires. Two, add lightning and glaring headlights? And three—if possible, add some onlookers, which can add more to the acting and the story. ![alt text]