First post/ 3rd Thursday
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Thank you all so much for the feedback, as I read the comments I'm instantly visualizing an updated concept that i feel will be an overall better design. I'll update with a new sketch.
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@HaHernandez like this idea and love your lines!
I'm trying to come up with how I want to say this but I'm not sure I have it right--basically it's looking a little "static" right now. It's just missing the punch.
I would disagree with one of the other crits you got--I think the lion is great. Even a "cuddly" lion would probably cause the teacher to panic.Try this: check out @natiwata 's entry and see how he sets up his arrangement. You have similar elements (girl, teacher, desk). But his is more dynamic where you have pretty much all vertical lines--and that is making your great drawing and great idea come off as a little weak.
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@HaHernandez btw love your work (on your portfolio site). Your pop tart kinda reminds me of a "kid version" of some of Dan Luvisi's work (his Micky Mouse).
Just a suggestion: Maybe put the "Innocent" B&W image instead of the cookie--or the Walking Bear. To me, those images are a little stronger.
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Thank you @mattramsey I understand what you mean, I'm gonna attempt to make the new composition more dynamic. I love your portfolio also, we have the same art heroes. Thanks for the portfolio advise too.
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Hello again, so after some helpful feedback I reworked the design and feel like this is more of the direction that I want to go in. The teacher now has more of a reason to panic but I'm trying to decide if it works better with the kids cheering the girl on or without them. Suggestions appreciated.
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Nice! Big improvement!!
Great looking lion. the one thing I would look at is how a claw on cats work. just reaching out the foot straight ahead like you have it lack a dynamic gesture. Maybe try some different poses for that whole arm and see what looks best. I prefer the one with the kids. (hilarious!)
Really cool!
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@HaHernandez i would keep the kids cheering on in there. Great job.
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Great job!
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@bharris Thank you, @Chip-Valecek, @Lee-White thanks for the input, I like the kids but wanted to make sure it wasn't too busy and I'm definitely going to use more reference as I refine it further . I'll continue to post the process as it goes on. I really wanted to thank everyone on here, I wasn't expecting so much community support and I'm glad @Will-Terry mentions svslearn so much on his youtube videos because I would've never known about this. There's a big difference in showing work to friends and family who all say its good but provide nothing else to getting honest feedback from people who seem genuinely invested in seeing people improve.
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I love the kids cheering. I am super impressed with how you've transformed this piece. You've inspired me to reconsider some of my decisions. Very nice job!
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It looks amazing! Fantastic improvement, so much more dynamic and I also prefer the one with the kids cheering
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Wow this is fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Great piece! Also love the kids!
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oh wow the second sketch is really nice!
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Wow! I just watched the Youtube critique this morning and saw that I was in the honorable mentions which was exciting enough considering the amazing talent that participated. The judges had some great feedback and tips which will definitely help with future submissions. The paint and draw overs were very educational and I was surprised how much information you could pick up on even if its not your piece being reworked. The big surprise though was when the winning image was displayed and it was mine. I truly was not expecting it and had to watch the end three times to make sure I wasnt misunderstanding it. Thank you to Will Terry, Jake Parker and of course Lee White for advising me to look at lion paw reference. It was an honor to participate and I look forward to the next one.
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@HaHernandez Congratulation! Amazing piece
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@NoWayMe Thank you, I still cant believe it.
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Awesome
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Congratulations! You did an excellent job.
