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    • Jason Bowen
      Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

      I've started a new piece, thought I'd try another 'whats going to happen next scene'. any critique is welcome. 0_1474322336195_warrior vs dragon.jpg

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      • Lee White
        Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

        Hey Jason,

        This is a tough one to crit for a number of reasons. It is very hard to understand what is happening here as the creature and the guy are just sitting next to one another. They don't look like they are aware of each other. Almost looks like two images side by side.

        If they are int the same scene, they aren't relating to each other in any way, so making the audience wonder what is going to happen next is a tall order since you haven't given us the requisite story telling elements to start to piece something together.

        I'd use this as a rough character study and make a new image that starts to tell us a bit more about both their relationship and the world they inhabit.

        SVS Faculty Instructor
        www.leewhiteillustration.com

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        • Lee White
          Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

          One other note, I'm not so sure this new style is working as well as it could be. I'm all for rough/loose brush strokes, but there needs to be an element of control. Nicolai Fechin was a master at this. Check him out if you don't know him

          0_1474330471036_fechin_the_art_and_the_life.jpg

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          • amberwingart
            amberwingart last edited by amberwingart

            I second everything Lee said! 🙂 I also just wanted to add a couple of things... This angle is really cool - it could have some great tension to it, if you can pull the characters into the same scene like Lee said. One of the first things that tell me what's going on in a scene is the characters' eyes - where are they looking? In your piece, the person whose eyes would tell us what to fear/feel/where to look, etc. would be the guy in front, but we can't see his eyes. And because the rest of his face is expressionless, we don't know if he's angry, afraid, ready to do battle, or even aware the monster is behind him - is the monster a dream? I'm looking forward to seeing more of this!

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            • Jason Bowen
              Jason Bowen SVS OG @Lee White last edited by

              @Lee-White Thanks for your thoughts. I have some ideas for this pic that I will pursue... Loving Fechins work pretty inspiring thanks.

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              • Jason Bowen
                Jason Bowen SVS OG @amberwingart last edited by

                @amberwingart Yeah in my head he was about to dart up a tree not too fussed, I should have thought of this as a series of images rather than a single one... Thanks for your comment. 🙂

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                • Jason Bowen
                  Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

                  Really enjoyed myself doing this, I am actually starting to feel a bit more confident with photoshop. I learn a bit more each picture I do... must start another one getting addicted haha

                  0_1474398906586_warrior vs monster 2.jpg

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