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    • korilynneillo
      korilynneillo @natiwata last edited by

      @natiwata I think B reads better as she's more compact and taking up a smaller space.

      I love your concept and think this is delightful! I agree with @MirkaH that you could definitely push the amount of things on the desk and I like the idea of an overflowing waste paper basket as well, but I think the illustration still works wonderfully without it.

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      • smceccarelli
        smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

        Beautiful! Very Zoothopian! B defnitely is better - the giraffe looks more uncomfortable than in A. I am a little distracted by the necklace (also because of the color you have sketched in). I a not sure if it is because it stops the flow of the neck or because it does not fit with the rest of her attire. Maybe you could try leaving it out?

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        • natiwata
          natiwata SVS OG @MirkaH last edited by

          @MirkaH @handdrawnviolist Thanks, and great suggestion to push the mess even further! I'm going to ramp it up.

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          • natiwata
            natiwata SVS OG @smceccarelli last edited by

            @smceccarelli Thank you, good point on the necklace, I'll play with placement and if it is more distracting than enhancing the piece.

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            • Jana
              Jana last edited by

              Hi! I agree to everything was was said before. Very nice pose particularly in B.
              I also was distracted by the neckless, because it made me wonder about the gender. The clothing looks more male to me.
              I am looking forward to see the finished piece. 🙂

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              • lmrush
                lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                I love it, I immediately thought she needs a really long loopy sippy straw to her coffee lol-you have mad drawing skills!

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                • lmrush
                  lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                  Just saw the necklace post , she could also have a very long turtle neck 🙂

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                  • Dulcie
                    Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

                    This is looking great already! I actually really like the necklace, it drew my attention but in a good way - it looks fun dangling like that. I'm more bothered about the neckline on the clothing - it maybe looks like the clothes don't have enough 'body' to them, maybe they should subtly stick out more compared to the giraffe's neck, if that makes sense. Also, I know this could be a perfectly sensible outfit for a working lady giraffe to wear, but I feel like that neckline could be more fun somehow - a collared shirt, or ruffle or buttons or something to make it more interesting and match the necklace in terms of fun accessories. Great ideas also from everyone else 🙂

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                    • Ed O
                      Ed O last edited by

                      I think it looks really cool! I love the way his neck is bent down. Great job!

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                      • drawingmelee
                        drawingmelee @natiwata last edited by

                        @natiwata My favorite is B as well.

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                        • Chip Valecek
                          Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

                          Looking great I also agree with everyone else B is the best option.


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