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    • tombarrettillo
      tombarrettillo last edited by

      yes, much better! I like the addition of the jock behind her. Look forward to seeing it colored.

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      • Eric Castleman
        Eric Castleman @NoWayMe last edited by

        @nowayme yup, this is a good one.

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        • TessaW
          TessaW last edited by

          The newer version illustrates the concept much better. Great job!

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          • Tyson Ranes
            Tyson Ranes @NoWayMe last edited by

            @nowayme on target concept, great work.

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            • evilrobot
              evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

              You have such strong story telling. Great job love this one.

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              • K
                Kat SVS OG last edited by

                Oh yes, the second one really illustrates his fear much better. Great job!

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                • Chip Valecek
                  Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

                  ah my son is going through this right now LOL. The new version works really well. You always kill it!


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                  • Laurel Aylesworth
                    Laurel Aylesworth @NoWayMe last edited by

                    @nowayme The heart decorations on the ceiling are an awesome touch.

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                    • bnewman
                      bnewman last edited by

                      Looking really good! Great image. Was definitely one of my worst fears growing up.

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                      • NoWayMe
                        NoWayMe last edited by NoWayMe

                        Thanks everyone! Here is my semi-final sketch. Still have to put in the decorations and finish the pictures in the locker. Critiques are welcome 🙂

                        0_1502732792976_Worst_fear_2.jpg

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                          A Former User @NoWayMe last edited by

                          @nowayme This is great! The interaction between the characters are clear and interesting. My only critique would be of the teen in love. He looks worried but not terrified.

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                          • Jose Ramos
                            Jose Ramos @NoWayMe last edited by Jose Ramos

                            @nowayme Great composition, maybe the guys in foreground shoud to be bigger, or at least the head of the left one.

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                            • DOTTYP
                              DOTTYP last edited by

                              Second one much better,I thought the first boy was being bullied (which would be a good fear) Great idea you have come up with.

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                              • tombarrettillo
                                tombarrettillo last edited by

                                looking good. I would open the locker boy's eyes, looking toward the girl (even though he can't see her because of the door; makes the connection better). Also, I would turn both boys' heads in the foreground to the left. I assume the one on the left is looking at the boy in the locker, but his head turned right seems unnatural.

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                                • DanetteDraws
                                  DanetteDraws @NoWayMe last edited by

                                  @nowayme I love this! The concept is great, and the drawing itself is well done. My only criticism is of the guy spinning the ball on his fingertip. To me he looks like an adult rather than a teenager.
                                  There were so many shy guys in my highschool. In my graduating year, three different guys signed my yearbook confessing they always had a crush on me but were too afraid to say anything. I was like 'awww - I wish you'd said something sooner!' And I was super shy myself, but still I was the one to ask guys to dance with me at school dances. haha The struggle is real. 😉
                                  Anyway - I can't wait to see it finished!

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                                  • NoWayMe
                                    NoWayMe last edited by NoWayMe

                                    This is what I have so far! Critiques are more then welcome 🙂

                                    0_1503886537416_Worst_fear_10.jpg

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                                    • tombarrettillo
                                      tombarrettillo last edited by

                                      Looking good so far! As a graphic design, the small flyer stands out to me. Might make it larger to fill the width of the door, and taller to look more like a poster.

                                      https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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                                      • Tyson Ranes
                                        Tyson Ranes @NoWayMe last edited by

                                        @nowayme Excellent work! You hit the criteria bullseye.

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                                        • Tyson Ranes
                                          Tyson Ranes @Tyson Ranes last edited by

                                          @tyson-ranes just noticed>>> basketball looks overly plain, if you could put some spinny line work or something that works with your overall style to show motion I think it would add an extra punch.

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                                          • Eric Castleman
                                            Eric Castleman @NoWayMe last edited by Eric Castleman

                                            @nowayme this is so good! I love how you took the prompt and really played with the idea in a very different way.

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