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    • Nyrryl  Cadiz
      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @gdbee last edited by

      @gdbee I'll try to incorporate your comments on the piece. Thank you so much for the critiques.

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      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

        Here... I've drawn the girl's face.
        0_1517355936825_2 dragon and knight.jpg

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        • demotlj
          demotlj SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

          @nyrryl-cadiz I love her face! That's why I asked because she looked awful relaxed if she were being rescued but I love this interpretation.

          Laurie DeMott
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          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @demotlj last edited by

            @demotlj Thanks. I wanted her to be this badass princess who got tired of waiting so she defeated her own dragon. 🙂

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            • Chip Valecek
              Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

              I would maybe show more of the other hand, I know its on the side and it might stand out more once colored but they look like little bumps. Maybe just extend them a little more. Also what if you opened the dragons mouth and had fire coming out? Just a thought, I think that would be cool with the color and bounce light off the knight.


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              • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Chip Valecek last edited by

                @chip-valecek Hi, I was also thinking about the dragon breathing fire but as awesome as it may, I want the attention to be on the princess. I'm not scrapping that idea though. I'll surely consider it. Thanks

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                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

                  Hi, Everybody! Just a quick update! I've just printed my sketch and have just started shading it using my good old 2B pencil. It's almost finished. 🙂

                  0_1517701673010_P_20180131_141616.jpg

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                  • MOO
                    MOO SVS OG last edited by

                    I like the second one because the sword is in a bettr position, not lost in the Dragons hands. The stance is a little wider or deeper..and gives it a bit more tension, like he's ready to defend!

                    Marsha Ottum Owen

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                    • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @MOO last edited by

                      @marsha-kay-ottum-owen Thank you. They are actually just the same illustration. But in the 2nd version, I enlarged the knight. I think it's more dynamic this way, more life, more tension (as you said). Again, thank you.

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                      • MOO
                        MOO SVS OG last edited by

                        @nyrryl-cadiz Looking forward to seeing the finished product 🙂

                        Marsha Ottum Owen

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                        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @MOO last edited by

                          @marsha-kay-ottum-owen thanks!

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                          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                            Hi! After leisurely sketching, I finally finished. Here it is. Hope you guys like it.

                            0_1517724369756_P_20180204_135134_1.jpg

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                            • MOO
                              MOO SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                              @nyrryl-cadiz Yes, it looks good! Just go tto add feet 🙂

                              Marsha Ottum Owen

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                              • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @MOO last edited by

                                @marsha-kay-ottum-owen oh... I didn't really plan on adding the feet. I was planning to just leave it at that. Do you think it's alright?

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                                • MOO
                                  MOO SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by MOO

                                  @nyrryl-cadiz 🙂 I like feet.

                                  Marsha Ottum Owen

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                                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @MOO last edited by

                                    @marsha-kay-ottum-owen haha 🙂 I'll think about it.

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                                    • RHirsch
                                      RHirsch @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                                      @nyrryl-cadiz I think if you crop it or frame it he won't need feet. Love a good dragon myself, and I like that she's giving raspberries to the knight. Good poses, and I also like the negative space around the sword.

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                                      • MOO
                                        MOO SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                                        @nyrryl-cadiz Really, I think it looks fine without feet. I was just looking at the bottom of the page and wondering why it wasn't finished 🙂

                                        Marsha Ottum Owen

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                                        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @MOO last edited by

                                          @marsha-kay-ottum-owen The paper was bigger than the illustration. 😃

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                                          • NizhoniWolf
                                            NizhoniWolf @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                                            @nyrryl-cadiz said in WIP- Critiques Wanted please:

                                            @demotlj Thanks for the critique! The princess is actually the rider. She's the more fearless one in this situation. I imagine her as some sort of damsel in distress who got tired of waiting and defeated the dragon who was guarding her tower. Now as her knight has arrived, we can see that she no longer needs his help.

                                            I LOVE that idea! (and i love her face lol) If it was me, i'd draw the knight a little more ...defeated? (is that the right word?) with a " aww maaann" slump to his shoulders (and his sword arm relaxed).

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