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    • Leontine
      Leontine last edited by

      hi there, Nice detective. It seems like his mouth is turned around and you could push the shades as well. Here is my thought. hope it works for you. the feel look a bit weird, maybe you should place them at one line, it looks a bit as if he's falling backwards? hope this is helpful. detective.png

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      • Rob Smith
        Rob Smith last edited by Rob Smith

        The right hand gripping the glowing object looks ackward. Wouldn't he be holding the object using his index finger and thumb? Would a slight bend in that arm add to the figure's pose?

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        • Steve Young
          Steve Young last edited by

          i like the idea, very funny. from what i can tell the proportion of your figure is wrong this is throwing your image off. the head is too big and i think arms are too long. Keep going you'll get there.

          Never give up, always push yourself two steps further than you believe you can go.

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          • Ben Rudnicki142
            Ben Rudnicki142 last edited by Ben Rudnicki142

            Thank you guys so much for the feedback. Here is the newest update with some of the revisions that I made. Fixed his hand and the angle his arm was and flipped the mouth to what it should have been. (Should have listened to my wife when she told me that the first time haha) I also tried to darken the shadows a bit. DetectiveRevised.jpg

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            • Lynn Larson
              Lynn Larson SVS OG last edited by

              Woohoo!! Looks great! the proportions fit together so much better! I still think you should flip that left foot to face forward, but that is just me 🙂 Nice job!

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              • Thrace
                Thrace last edited by

                Wow, it looks so much better!

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                • Ben Rudnicki142
                  Ben Rudnicki142 last edited by

                  Thanks everyone!

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                  • Javier Diaz
                    Javier Diaz last edited by

                    So I ended up giving this a bit of a draw over. I think the idea is good, it's just the silhouette needs a bit of tweaking. I gave him more of a streamlined look, since he tends to be lanky. Also changed his pose, since it was a bit confusing if he was confident or unsure of himself. Then I also changed the hand, as it was difficult to read before.

                    sherlock_changes.jpg

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                    • Steve Young
                      Steve Young last edited by

                      Think about your characters silhouette, if that reads well, then you're on the right track. Good work so far.

                      Never give up, always push yourself two steps further than you believe you can go.

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                      • Rob Smith
                        Rob Smith last edited by

                        So much better. Keep going!

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                        • Leontine
                          Leontine @Ben Rudnicki142 last edited by

                          @Ben-Rudnicki142 Hi There Ben, Your on the right track there!

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                          • Ben Rudnicki142
                            Ben Rudnicki142 last edited by

                            Thanks @javier-diaz the draw over makes more sense. I was trying to go for a more dynamic pose like this 306770-the-great-mouse-detective.jpg but even with that I don't have that line of action correct. I definitely agree I need to make it more readable. The hand makes a lot more sense as well seeing it the way you did. I will keep reworking this and post the update when I get a chance.

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                            • Ben Rudnicki142
                              Ben Rudnicki142 last edited by

                              Ok here is my latest revision. I changed the hands as per your suggestion @javier-diaz . I also adjusted that rear foot like you mentioned @lynn-larson. I tried readjusting the posing but I need to work on that more as it seemed like a completely different character, I probably just need to work on it more but I was growing frustrated with it. DetectiveRevised2.jpg DetectivePoseChange.jpg

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                              • Lynn Larson
                                Lynn Larson SVS OG last edited by

                                I looks much better to me, but i see where you were trying to go with it 🙂 the mouse's shoulders are back much further, which makes the rear facing foot seem more in line. The latest version is going well 🙂

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                                • Jana
                                  Jana last edited by

                                  What might help you in finding the right pose is to draw a stick figure over your reference detective and to use this stick figure as base for your drawing. Don't give up... 😊

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                                  • Javier Diaz
                                    Javier Diaz last edited by

                                    You're on the right track! Ended up doing a bit of a draw over again. In that reference image of TGMD, I would look at his pose. They are really pushing it. Of course, that is more whimsical, but the same rules apply.

                                    I also shortened the extended arm as it was too large.
                                    sherlock.png

                                    Hope this helps.

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                                    • ?
                                      A Former User last edited by

                                      Hello everyone, I'm not a pro so my advise is only my opinion and experimentation, so don't take this as expert advise. I did some tweaking of the pose and added a dynamic pose as the mouse. It's really, really exaggerated. I either butchered the image or made some surgical work to it, but it's up to you if I've helped or not.
                                      DrawOverdetectiverevised.jpg

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