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    • lei
      lei last edited by

      Agreed with @JohnMK - the text for the title could use that space better. There's plenty of room to the left and right... any chance you can experiment with setting the type along a curve?

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      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by

        This is really beautiful. If I could offer any critique, it would be to maybe just very subtly tweak the octopus a bit- get some smaller salt granule texture on him, and get a gradation on him, like you have on the mermaid. Maybe darker toward the top of his head, gradating lighter as you go down.

        Overall, great job! This is definitely a book I would want to pick up and look through.

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        • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
          Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG @JohnMK last edited by

          @johnmk Thanks John. I appreciate that. Yes, I can make the type stronger and better to read. This is for little children so very important they can read the text easily. Thanks for pointing that out.

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          • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
            Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG @lei last edited by

            @lei Thanks Lei. Yes, setting the text along a curve is a good idea. I'll have a go at moving the text around and see how it can read better.

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            • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
              Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

              @tessaw Thanks so much Tessa. You're right there, Larry could use some gradation couldn't he. I made his tentacles darker orange at one point but I didn't try lighter. Cool. It will be fun to try that. I will have a look at tweeking the texture on Larry aswell. Great ideas. I really appreciate it!

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              • rcartwright
                rcartwright last edited by

                Do have plan for placing the names?

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                • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
                  Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG @rcartwright last edited by

                  @rcartwright Yes, on the lower corners. What do you think?

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                  • rcartwright
                    rcartwright @Judy Elizabeth Wilson last edited by

                    @judy-elizabeth-wilson First off I really like this overall, great colors and shapes but I think the ring may cause you some issues, the names may look squished into the corners and the company may also want a larger title

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                    • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
                      Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG last edited by Judy Elizabeth Wilson

                      Day 360/365. Lol posted this in the wrong thread.
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                        AnthonyWheeler last edited by

                        I really like the illustration.

                        Question: What does the Octopus lie about? As he sits on the illustration, he looks like a sweet, innocent Octo with nothing to hide. While he still may be a sweet, innocent Octo in the story, can you incorporate something into his pose or tentacles that fleshes out the "lying" bit?

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                          IanS last edited by

                          The only constructive feedback I can give is I think the font is too harsh. I'd like to see a brighter colour for the font but that's just one man's opinion. The illustration, the composition and the characters are lovely! Great work.

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                          • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
                            Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG last edited by

                            Thanks for everyones critiques. I have realised something I hadn't noticed before even though I have seen so many children's book front covers. I was amazed at how many front covers have colourful text, sometimes one colour, sometimes many colours, the text is equally as colourful as the image. It's really cool to register something new.

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                            • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
                              Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG @IanS last edited by

                              @ians Thanks Ian. Great comment. I'm so glad I posted this image because the comments have been so helpful. I like the idea of a colourful font.

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                              • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
                                Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG @AnthonyWheeler last edited by

                                @anthonywheeler Thanks so much Anthony. Larry blames his friends. He's learning how to own up to making big mistakes. Maybe he could have something in his tentacle hiding behind his back?

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                                  AnthonyWheeler @Judy Elizabeth Wilson last edited by

                                  @judy-elizabeth-wilson I think you need something. Your description of Larry isn't indicated in his art OR any of the art around the ring of of the illustration. Its cute and all but you aren't doing enough to sell the concept of Larry Lying.

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