PP WIP- in the mood for hedgehogs

[Jiří Kůs]

Very cute
But it seems a bit dark to me, just tiny bit. Especially compared to the moon. I feel it might be stealing attention from the hedgehog.

Concerning the leaves... they fee a bitl weird an unnatural or artificial to me. They fall straight down, I dont think leaves fall this way. It is just a gut feeling.. They blend a bit with the background since they have exact same pattern as branches on the background trees. Light might be also a bit off since they are quite close to the lantern, but quite dark.

EDIT: my contrast on was too low and it was way darker than it really is, sorrry

[Ace Connell]

It's looking lovely. I'd just be a bit more conscious of the texture throughout. If you look near the moon, there's a ton of texture, whereas the grass just looks like an airbrush gradient. I'm liking the composition. I think the leaves could maybe do to be a bit smaller, but the character design is lovely.

Ace

EDIT: Also the hedgehog... The spikes are amazingly textured and then the body looks a bit digital to me.

Hope this helps.

[Thrace]

Lovely image! I would take the leaves out you don't need them and I would remove some of the texture around the moon. I love your characters, adorable!!

[Jana]

My feeling is that the mood of fall would get a bit lost without the falling leaves. You might add then some fall related structure on the ground or more fall related colors, like with the acorn.

[Leontine]

adjusted version...more leaves on the soil?

[Leontine]

@Jana danke schön Jana, soll ich weitere Blätter hinzufügen?

[Leontine]

@Jiří-Kůs thank you, I ve worked on the piece a bit. How about now?

[Leontine]

@Ace-Connell Hi Ace, worked on it a bit, what do you think?

[Jana]

Wow, Leontine, the piece improved even more. I like the texture you have added to Miss Hedgehog.
Maybe two more leaves, like close to the stones... That might be fine.
Your German speaking brought me a big smile!

[Leontine]

@Jana Thank you. Ill work on the leaves, thanks for the example! ich habe versucht, auf Deutsch zu schreiben, weil wir Nachbarn sind, Hoffentlich etwas was ich gelernt habe im schule is noch geblieben. XD

[Jiří Kůs]

@Leontine Moving that leaf did so much! I think it works now.

[Leontine]

@Jiří-Kůs thanks!

[Leontine]

and the latest one

[Jana]

Super! Sehr schön.

[Dulcie]

@Leontine there are so many things to like about this piece I love the way you’ve lit the scene, the way the moonlight shines through the leaves…the feel of glow from the lamp, also the design of the glowworm and the pencil texture I think the moon is great. But the leaves do bother me, for a few reasons…the scene feels very still, like there is no wind, so less likely for leaves to fall….I actually don’t think you need the leaves in the composition even though they are beautifully drawn…though they do tie in with the brown of the hedgehog….maybe if at the top there was a branch visible with more leaves, to show where the falling leaves are coming from…I know that might be tricky to work in now you’ve taken the piece this far…if you extended the top of the frame then a branch could curve round and frame the picture nicely…just an idea though…

Other thing, the bush behind the glowworm might look better with more leafy texture on it…the glow from the lamp might catch some leaf outlines a bit more….maybe also by the hedgehog’s foot, could have a little more ground/grassy texture to show that it’s natural…..sorry this sounds like a lot of things! Just ideas, and really overall it is a lovely piece

PS. Wrote this comment before seeing latest version…the added texture/light on the hedgehog looks great

[Naroth Kean]

I really enjoy this piece the lighting is great! yes I agree leaves are a bit distracting to me as well. I think It might work if you actually make them fall a bit in distant because right now I am seeing one of the leaves is close to the size of the moon which kind of competing with each other. Banding trees a bit to the right might help to suggest sense of wind if you still want the leaves to be there.

[Ace Connell]

@Leontine Yeah, it's definitely tying together now!

The leaf above the hedgehog's head on first quick read looks like a ginormous leaf and that it's going behind the tree because of the same values of the leaf/tree and the brown thing in-between the trees that looks like it's the end of the stem of the leaf. It's not until you look at it that you notice it's two separate objects and in-front of the tree.

I'd maybe make the leaves smaller too.

It's really looking gorgeous now though!

Ace

[Ace Connell]

Another thing too, if you squint your eyes, the biggest contrast is the secondary light hitting the spikes from the moon. That seems to jump out a little too much for me and because of the contrast becomes the focal point, so I'd tone down that light a bit so it doesn't distract from the face

Ace

[Rachael Moody]

Loving everything you've done so far! the soft playfulness of this piece is very charming!
My only suggestion right now would be to curl the tail of the glow worm to the front. This way that bright light is not behind/away from the two character's faces, dragging the eyes away from their interaction. Make sense? Hope this helps!

[Leontine]

@Rachael-Moody thanks!