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    Piece for the Live Critique on Tuesday

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    • Kevin Longueil
      Kevin Longueil SVS OG last edited by

      Wow - really beautifully done - very tight image - nothing to say but Wow

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        seanwelty last edited by

        Love the image. It has a clear focal point. Good job with the lighting. I think a bit more time can be spent on the hands and I feel the thinner paintbrush is a bit out of scale. The perspective is a bit off especially on the wall on the right. These are all very minor issues that really don't distract me, but I was struggling to come up with issues in this image. I never like to just say good job when others are looking for critiques.

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        • Jana
          Jana last edited by

          I agree with the others that it is hard to find something to improve on this piece. I love the lighting and the limited palette. I also feel that the perspective is a little off. But this is really minor. I was a bit distracted by his feet. While all the proportion over the whole body are pretty realistic the feet are really tiny. But as I said, I just saw it while starring and looking for "mistakes".;-)

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          • Rich Green
            Rich Green SVS OG last edited by

            This piece is really wonderful. I also agree that the feet of the boy look a little bit too small but I had to really spend some time looking at this to even notice that. I really love the lighting and overall composition of this piece. Nice work!

            www.richgreenart.com instagram.com/richgreenart/

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              seanwelty last edited by

              One other thought... I noticed that your edges seem to be a bit haphazard. for instance, you have some soft edges in the background, on the box and part of the easel. This seems to be an issue with working digitally. when things are kept on separate layers it makes working much more efficient, but the hard edges can break the illusion of the traditional feel. Look at the books in the foreground and how hard the edges are. I like to save hard to direct the viewers eye to areas of interest and soften the areas that are less important.

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              • Rob Smith
                Rob Smith last edited by

                You did a really great job on this piece. I will leave the critique up to the professionals!!

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                • Lynn Larson
                  Lynn Larson SVS OG last edited by

                  What Rob said! Hehe, i love the expression on his face...so deep in concentration! I can't believe he doesn't have paint on him somewhere 😛

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                  • Charlie Eve Ryan
                    Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG last edited by

                    Really beautiful, I love the light peeking through the wood.

                    Happy Creating
                    www.charlieeveryan.com

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                    • shinjifujioka
                      shinjifujioka SVS OG last edited by

                      Yeah, I was thinking about slightly increasing the size of his feet, and then I thought that if I increased the size of his feet, I'd have to adjust the shadows on the floor as well. So my laziness got the best of me. But since it was pointed out, I guess I'll have to suck it up and make the change 🙂

                      shinjifujioka.com
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                      IG: @shinjifujiokastudio

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                      • Lee White
                        Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                        lovely work here! You are getting good!

                        SVS Faculty Instructor
                        www.leewhiteillustration.com

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                        • mattramsey
                          mattramsey @shinjifujioka last edited by

                          @shinjifujioka said:

                          Yeah, I was thinking about slightly increasing the size of his feet, and then I thought that if I increased the size of his feet, I'd have to adjust the shadows on the floor as well. So my laziness got the best of me. But since it was pointed out, I guess I'll have to suck it up and make the change 🙂

                          You wouldn't have to change the size of the feet if they are a design choice.

                          Overall I have no real critiques. This is a beautiful piece and you've done a masterful job. Seems pro-level to me.

                          https://www.inprnt.com/gallery/mattramsey/
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                          • Nancy Gormezano
                            Nancy Gormezano last edited by

                            I love the little feet and his costume. Beautiful piece. The only thing that feels slightly off to me is that the face seems rendered in a harder edge style than the rest of the piece, which feels lovely soft, fuzzy.

                            https://www.facebook.com/nancy.gormezano

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                            • Will Terry
                              Will Terry last edited by

                              I can't wait to critique this one Shinji - When a piece is really good it's easy to make subtle suggestions and then take credit for it - HA! ...really nice - hope we come up with some good suggestions...

                              SVS Instructor
                              http://willterry.com/

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                              • Naroth Kean
                                Naroth Kean last edited by

                                This is awesome! I really like the character, the lighting and those little tiny paintings hanging there really add a lot to the story. I remember him from your "frustrating piece" you posted some time ago haha. Btw what is GPLW?

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                                • shinjifujioka
                                  shinjifujioka SVS OG @Naroth Kean last edited by

                                  @Naroth-Kean You got that right, haha, he is the same character from my "frustrating piece". If you take a look at the cover of the book at the top of the stack, that is the illustration that I originally was going to put him in.

                                  And GPLW stands for "Great Power Lies Within". Sometimes I just put little made up acronyms in my illustration kind of as a message to myself.

                                  shinjifujioka.com
                                  https://www.facebook.com/shinjifujiokaart
                                  IG: @shinjifujiokastudio

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                                  • mattramsey
                                    mattramsey last edited by

                                    Will this critique be available for everyone to watch? Maybe posted on YouTube later?

                                    https://www.inprnt.com/gallery/mattramsey/
                                    https://mattramsey.artstation.com/
                                    https://twitter.com/mramseyART

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                                    • bharris
                                      bharris last edited by

                                      Stunning work!

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                                      • shinjifujioka
                                        shinjifujioka SVS OG @mattramsey last edited by

                                        @mattramsey According to the class description, the critique will be viewable by other SVS students. But I'm not sure when and how...

                                        shinjifujioka.com
                                        https://www.facebook.com/shinjifujiokaart
                                        IG: @shinjifujiokastudio

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                                        • craigrussellart
                                          craigrussellart last edited by

                                          That's fantastic @shinjifujioka !

                                          I'm gonna be in the critique session too. My work's nowhere near as good as yours though. Looking forward to it anyway. 🙂

                                          Craig

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                                          • shinjifujioka
                                            shinjifujioka SVS OG last edited by

                                            For those interested, these are the progress pics from really rough sketch to final. Currently, this is more or less my usual work process.

                                            Dragon Fire Progress small.jpg

                                            shinjifujioka.com
                                            https://www.facebook.com/shinjifujiokaart
                                            IG: @shinjifujiokastudio

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