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    • TessaW
      TessaW last edited by

      I like the contrast and the dog design of the digital, but like the comp and details of the traditional piece.

      Website: www.tessawrathall.com

      Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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        jdubz @clipant last edited by jdubz

        @clipant Thanks for the comments. I definitely noticed that. I might widen the scene a bit. What's really odd about the perspective is that I changed the doorframe to match the actual perspective grid I was using for the room, but it looks off even though it's lining up and I don't know why that is. Maybe it's just the size??

        Appreciate the comments all... honestly I'm not sure what to do with it. I'll see if I can fix some of the issues digitally. I kind of felt similarly where there were things the digital version solved, but I still thought the traditional was more... (maybe compelling is the right word??) to look at. I might just redraw a larger traditional to try and solve those problems. I'm definitely having a far harder time getting the details "right" on the digital version because the feel is just not the same being able to hatch on actual paper with 3 different pen types.

        Josh White
        https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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          jdubz @chrisaakins last edited by

          @chrisaakins I really like how yours is coming together - is that all digital? I'm really not sure how to fix the contrast issues in the scanned image. I tried also to take a hi-res image of it on my phone and still isn't looking great.

          Maybe I can mess with the levels in PS on the larger version, then shrink it down.

          Josh White
          https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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          • gubhart
            gubhart @jdubz last edited by

            @jdubz I too prefer the traditional sketch but prefer the dog in the digital one. I think the issue with the door looking weird is that in a normal room even with tall ceilings the top of the door frame will be about 2/3rds up the wall. The top of your door is a bit far away from the junction of the wall and ceiling?

            https://www.instagram.com/gubhart/

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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins @jdubz last edited by

              @jdubz Thanks! I work traditionally and then edit it on IG to make it look good in terms of tone and contrast.most of the originals look better than my photos. I, too, need a good scanner. I may edit/colorize some of my next few ones in PS because my markers are running out. Maybe you could scan it in and just edit it?

              Chris Akins
              www.chrisakinsart.com
              www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                jdubz @chrisaakins last edited by jdubz

                @chrisaakins Do you mean Instagram when you say IG? Your scanning familiarity is definitely more advanced than mine 😛

                I think I need to just sit down for a couple of hours and figure out how best to get the balance in PS. I attempted to edit it a bit, but the sections I changed just didn't match and it started to look disjointed.

                @gubhart Yes I think that's it exactly. I didn't flip my canvas at all and looking at it today that's definitely messed up scale-wise when I read that comment and then looked at it with fresh eyes this morning.

                Josh White
                https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                • chrisaakins
                  chrisaakins @jdubz last edited by

                  @jdubz I do mean Instagram.

                  Chris Akins
                  www.chrisakinsart.com
                  www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                    jdubz last edited by

                    I tried something completely different - I inked the original sketch using Procreate and I attempted to combine elements from both images to get the better pieces of both worlds

                    prompt-procreate.jpg

                    Josh White
                    https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                    • chrisaakins
                      chrisaakins @jdubz last edited by

                      @jdubz I like it! Looks like a contender for sure!

                      Chris Akins
                      www.chrisakinsart.com
                      www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                      • TessaW
                        TessaW last edited by TessaW

                        Shia LaBeouf slow clap 👏🏽 👏🏽 👏🏽

                        This turned out soooo good!

                        Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                        Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                          jdubz last edited by

                          Thanks all - really appreciate all the great feedback. I'm going to try and get some more consistency in that top left hatching then I'll call this one done!

                          Josh White
                          https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                          • Zachary Drenski
                            Zachary Drenski last edited by

                            This turned out great!

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