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    • phoenix yip
      phoenix yip last edited by

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      I made this comp sketch for slowvember. Do any of you guys have any critiques mainly composition wise, be as picky and specific as you can. That would help a lot. Thanks!

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      • Chip Valecek
        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

        the wire going across the piece keeps pulling my eye back to it. It is pulling focus from your focal point.


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        • phoenix yip
          phoenix yip @Chip Valecek last edited by

          @Chip-Valecek Thank you! I appreciate it, I’ll go head and do that

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          • KaraDaniel
            KaraDaniel last edited by

            Looks like its going to be a really interesting piece. Looking forward to seeing what becomes of your sketch.

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            • phoenix yip
              phoenix yip @Chip Valecek last edited by

              @Chip-Valecek Is there anything else you would change? Thanks!

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              • phoenix yip
                phoenix yip @KaraDaniel last edited by

                @KaraDaniel Thanks! Means a lot!

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                • Chip Valecek
                  Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @phoenix yip last edited by

                  @phoenix-yip as of right now that is all that stands out. Once you start to define your shapes and add details, it will all start to come together and then you can look and tweak as you move along.


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                  • phoenix yip
                    phoenix yip @Chip Valecek last edited by

                    @Chip-Valecek great, thank you

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                      Kevin Terry last edited by

                      Really nice feeling of space! I agree that the wire is distracting and maybe it would feel even more spacious if the contrast in value was higher. Overall nice composition.

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                      • phoenix yip
                        phoenix yip @Kevin Terry last edited by

                        @Kevin-Terry Thanks a lot!

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