28 Nov 2015, 00:13
Hi everyone! I would like to get some opinion on this piece. Do you think that big rock is way too center on the page? Does it matter when it is at the gutter? Text will go at the biggest white cloud. Thank you in advance! 
After the storm
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Hi everyone! I would like to get some opinion on this piece. Do you think that big rock is way too center on the page? Does it matter when it is at the gutter? Text will go at the biggest white cloud. Thank you in advance!
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I think so Naroth - my brain wants to move the big rock to where the rock with the birds are - and possibly put the bird rock where the little rock on the right is ....maybe not so far to the right but over there - you could paint another flying fish on that side at a smaller scale so it is about the same distance back as the rock with birds and you could have the little birds looking up at the flying fish....or not
long answer to a short question - yes i think it will be too large and mysterious if the the big rock is in the gutter - could be wrong though...i do love your painting though! -
@Kevin-Longueil Thank you, that is a very good suggestion. The original was only half page but I decided to extend the whole page and realized something is weird about the rock haha. it was like this. Thanks again.
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here the change!
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This looks good - each page reads well as its own composition and the spread reads well as a composition too - i don't think this is necessary but i think it is a bit of a home run when you make it happen - the text will add visual weight to the right side of the composition too as you said - i like how you changed the birds to have them looking in different directions with only a few having discovered the flying fish - really looks nice!
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thank you so much I really like the change as well. -
looks good Naroth. The change really helped. I like the watercolour look and the cloud looks nice.
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I think the change looks great! Excellent watercolor
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This is very sweet!Everything stands out really well , even in all blue tones!
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I like the change and your color choice is great. Nice!!
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@Naroth-Kean if this is a sunny day you can push that idea more by adding more contrast to the fish in the foreground. Most likely, the tops of the fish would be in full light and should be the lightest value in the image. Add some cast shadows from the wings/fins and wrap the shadows around the bod to show form. These fish would be very shiny and will have very defined specular highlights.
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@Lee-Holland @Dan-Tavis @Bharris @Rob-Smith Thank you guys I really appreciate it!
@seanwelty Thanks Sean, that is a very good suggestion. -
@Naroth-Kean beautiful! Flying fishes are so funny! I love the colors, and the composition is very good. Good Job Naroth!
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Very nice!
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@Leontine @Lee-White
Thanks a lot guys! much appreciate.