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    aprilshin last edited by 4 May 2020, 02:04

    Hello!

    I'm trying to go through all the steps that @Lee-White lists on how to make art you really love! Here are 4 thumbnails I like from the 50+ I explored. Which one do you guys think best represents the prompt and is also the most interesting?

    1. A girl is filling up the space inside a house and is reading a book. The garage/room next to hers is filled with books.

    2. This one's a little NSFW, but it's a girl with a house-head. I might throw a striped shirt on her, not sure yet.

    3. A person's head and torso are inside a house. They are standing inside a fenced area while smaller people mingle around the outside of the fence.

    4. A lonely man is sitting on top of a sagging house. The blobs above are clouds.

    I appreciate any help I can get! Thank you so much! ❤

    Isolation.jpg

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      carlianne @aprilshin last edited by 4 May 2020, 03:26

      @aprilshin #3 is the one that looks the most like isolation to me!

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        aprilshin @carlianne last edited by 4 May 2020, 03:36

        @carlianne Thank you so much for your input! I appreciate it!

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          Neha Rawat last edited by 4 May 2020, 04:13

          #3 for me too!

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            aprilshin @Neha Rawat last edited by 4 May 2020, 04:21

            @Neha-Rawat Thank you, Neha!

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              A Former User last edited by 4 May 2020, 05:33

              I love them all, but my as-is favorite is #3 as well.

              The first one could use a parked car and a lawn or something to show her scale.

              The second one could be wearing a shirt or a necklace with a pathway to the front door. 🙂

              Which one were you leaning toward?

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                aprilshin @Guest last edited by 4 May 2020, 05:59

                @carolinebautista Thank you, Caroline! I like #2, and I put a shirt on her and I like it better, haha. I see what you mean by scale for the first one. I drew cleaner versions for each and I added a chimney and tiny roof tiles for #1; hopefully that's enough?

                Some problems I'm having: I'm unsure how I should draw the tiny people in #3 so that it matches the style of the house-person. And I'm still struggling with composition overall. I tend to put everything dead center, but I'm not sure how to change it up. 😞 Maybe I didn't explore enough options during my thumbnails.

                I appreciate your input! Thank you again!

                Iso Comp.jpg

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                  ArtofAleksey @aprilshin last edited by 4 May 2020, 07:20

                  @aprilshin #3 is the only one of these that has a strong sense of story telling

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                    aprilshin @ArtofAleksey last edited by 4 May 2020, 07:44

                    @ArtofAleksey Thank you, Aleksey! It appears that #3 is the clear winner. Thanks so much for your help! 😃

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                      teresaro last edited by 4 May 2020, 10:07

                      I actually prefer both 1 and 4 for concepts. Although they’d need a bit of work because in 1 she looks happy reading her books, in which case why is she feeling so tight inside? And in 4 he looks like a sad and lonely giant so maybe you could illustrate the isolation factor in a clearer way to explain why he’s so sad. Like people in a distance maybe?

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                        aprilshin @teresaro last edited by 4 May 2020, 13:11

                        @teresaro Thank you for your feedback, Teresa! I redrew a couple of them to try to convey a story and added value. But... I'm not sure that it's any better.

                        I feel like I'm getting more confused/discouraged the longer I spend on these. I think maybe I'm moving onto the next steps too quickly? Perhaps I need to go back to thumbnailing while focusing on storytelling. Or maybe I just need to take a break 😛

                        Thanks, everyone, for your feedback! I'm going to sleep and see if I can do better tomorrow.

                        Untitled_Artwork 2.jpg

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                        • Braxton
                          Braxton last edited by Braxton 4 May 2020, 16:00 4 May 2020, 15:51

                          I actually quite like number 1...to me it communicates that isolating can actually feel nhice and cozy for us introverts sometimes (as long as you have a dog and some books). It reminds a little of this illustration

                          rain reading.JPG

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                            A Former User @aprilshin last edited by A Former User 4 May 2020, 16:46 4 May 2020, 16:44

                            @aprilshin For the process Lee White explained, I don't do 50 thumbnails of different concepts, I usually choose a concept and zoom around to try out different camera angles. When I get more comfortable with doing that many thumbnails, I will hopefully be able to add more concepts in at the beginning and be able to choose better or go between them, but I still have this feeling like I can't do that many, so will keep doing thumbnails with a very narrow focus. Sometimes this doesn't work, but sometimes it's exactly what I need to push beyond putting each different concept in the center.

                            In the editorial illustration class, James Yang had more of a process like this, where he thumbnailed different concepts and chose one and then painted it. Your process might be like that too, but it does seem like he just knows already what will work in his very abstract style. That's the kind of thing I can't know yet, so I have to leave a lot more room to explore.

                            If you do more thumbnails of #3, for instance, you might try out the pov of the people on the ground looking up, and although you may not ever choose that one, trying out a crazy pov may help you add what you need to the original composition to strengthen the concept, or it may help you know how you want to draw the people really small. Each exploration will have a different feeling, so I try to choose the pov with the feeling I want to convey.

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                              Braxton @Guest last edited by 4 May 2020, 17:17

                              @carolinebautista Could you point me to where Lee White explains his process? I feel like I've heard bits and pieces of it but not the whole thing.

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                                A Former User @Braxton last edited by 4 May 2020, 17:57

                                @Braxton Here's the video about the process he uses, where he outlines the steps: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h6u_g0RPiCA

                                He got questions about how to do thumbnails from that video so he did another one on thumbnails: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jghVE4V5FfU

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                                  Braxton @Guest last edited by Braxton 4 May 2020, 18:36 4 May 2020, 18:34

                                  @carolinebautista thanks! One thing I've been struggling with a bit, is when I make initial thumbnails it feels like I'm trying to work out the basic idea at the same time as figuring out the composition, and trying to do both things simultaneously is difficult for me.

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                                    aprilshin @Braxton last edited by 5 May 2020, 01:18

                                    @Braxton I do the same thing! I guess maybe I need to spend more time in the research phase. Maybe my “thumbnails” were actually just my way of exploring ideas, and once I narrow it down to a single idea, then that’s when I dive deeper with 50 thumbnails exploring that one idea.

                                    Thank you @carolinebautista for explaining how you do it! I think I need to review Lee’s 50 thumbnails video, too. Thanks so much, everyone! ❤️

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                                      aprilshin last edited by 5 May 2020, 08:21

                                      Okay, so I decided to work on #1 for now. I might end up working on all four this month. Here is my color study for the drawing. I picked colors from illustrations I liked by other artists, but it doesn't look nearly as great, and I'm not sure what I'm doing wrong. I did digress from my original value study because I got tired of putting the dark colors for the hair and pants every time, lol.

                                      Does anyone see any glaring mistakes I'm making with color? Is there one that works better than the rest?

                                      Iso Color Study.jpg

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                                        aprilshin last edited by 5 May 2020, 12:07

                                        More color studies. I think the latter half of this round was more successful because I started mixing my own colors using opacity. It feels more unified to me and I think I'm getting closer to finding the perfect colors, haha.

                                        I pulled the original colors from a website: coolors.co if anyone is looking for color palette generators. It's pretty easy to use!

                                        Untitled_Artwork.jpg

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                                          aprilshin last edited by 6 May 2020, 02:00

                                          Third round of color studies. I think what I didn't like about the 1st color study was that it was too dark/saturated. I know I'm starting to get less contrast, but maybe the contrast doesn't have to be so dramatic? I think I'm going to go with one from the previous set, though.

                                          My next step is to make a clean sketch and then onto the final painting! I don't think I've ever put this much work into even a simple drawing like this, but I think the result will be much better than if I hadn't taken all the steps.

                                          Any and all critiques are always welcome. Thank you!

                                          Untitled_Artwork 2.jpg

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