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    A 3rd Thursday Critique, Please?

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    • Timbdsf
      Timbdsf last edited by

      Hello! If anyone has a little time, I'd love your thoughts on what I might do to improve this piece. There are a few things I still plan to do, but I'd gladly hear anything you have to suggest. Thanks so much! hawkins.jpg

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      • Lydia M
        Lydia M last edited by

        Hi! I really like "powdery" look of this and of course jet packs. I wish they were taking off though. Right now they are bent over with their glowing booties pointed at one another. I'm not trying to be crass. That's just the first thing that I noticed and my mind went there.

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        • Thrace
          Thrace last edited by

          I think this is a really cute image and I like the feel with the powdery snow, however, the elves look like they are getting set on the line for a football play. Sorry, its a great idea that just what it feels like to me.

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          • Timbdsf
            Timbdsf last edited by

            Yup. That's what I was going for.

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            • Katrina Fowler
              Katrina Fowler last edited by

              Hey there. Here are a few observations:

              • Snowman and Mrs. Claus have the same pose and are about the same size. On purpose?

              • Snowman seems a bit lonely in the field by himself...

              • I doesn't read to me that the elves have jet packs on. It just looks like their little bumms were alight.

              • Goggles are a bit dark. They look like welding goggles.

              So I did a quick color enhancement to brighten it up a bit - hope you don't mind. Keep at it. You are don't great!

              push color.jpg

              "Never give up! Never surrender!" ~Commander Peter Quincy Taggert

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              • Timbdsf
                Timbdsf @Katrina Fowler last edited by

                @Katrina-Fowler Great advice, Katrina! I really appreciate it!

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