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    WIP - Bongo the monkey. Your Feedback is greatly appreciated.

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    • cszoltan
      cszoltan last edited by

      Hello Everyone,
      I have been working on the exiting project for the past week in my spare time, very exited about how it came out, but I`m still not sure if I could consider it finished.
      Maybe something is still missing or something can still be tweaked to make it better.
      Please share your thoughts, what do you think?

      Thank you, and much Love to you all!

      Illustration_Bongo_the_Monkey_CS_Zoltan.jpg

      C.S.Zoltan
      Portfolio: www.behance.net/cszoltan
      Instagram: www.instagram.com/c.s.zoltan

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      • Annaaronson
        Annaaronson last edited by

        I love this! I think your composition is super interesting. I think you could totally call this finished if you wanted to. The only other thing I can think of is that you could add some more detail to the main characters. Right now the level of detail between them going outwards is similar and you could add a bit more contrast. I donโ€™t think itโ€™s necessary, but itโ€™s an idea!
        Well done!

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        • franksandovalart
          franksandovalart @cszoltan last edited by franksandovalart

          @cszoltan
          Great work so far!
          The only thing that got my attention, Clyde's position, feels like he is to close to the dirt edge, feels more like he is in a pool than a river, you could fix that by moving Clyde up and back some more strait in to Bongo's sight, it will help with the composition, you might have to move the second crocodile or get rid of it, its up to you.

          That's my two cents, hope it helps!!

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          • Jane Smith 0
            Jane Smith 0 last edited by

            Ha! What a great expression on Clyde!

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            • baileyvidler
              baileyvidler last edited by

              This is a fantastic composition and use of colors! I agree with @franksandovalart that it feels like the water should be too shallow there at the edge for Clyde. Maybe if you moved him back a bit? Or showed his back above the water? (Like the top alligator.)

              Bailey Vidler
              Portfolio: baileyvidler.com

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              • cszoltan
                cszoltan @franksandovalart last edited by

                @franksandovalart Yes, his position always felt a bit off when I was painting him.
                Will definitely try to move him up, it will probably be more balanced that way!
                Thank you Frank, have an awesome weekend!

                C.S.Zoltan
                Portfolio: www.behance.net/cszoltan
                Instagram: www.instagram.com/c.s.zoltan

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                • cszoltan
                  cszoltan @Annaaronson last edited by

                  @Annaaronson Thank you Anna, they have subtle details on them, but if you view them zoomed ot, it king of fades out, and with all the details on the plants, they do seem a bit flat, so I will look in to that!

                  C.S.Zoltan
                  Portfolio: www.behance.net/cszoltan
                  Instagram: www.instagram.com/c.s.zoltan

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                  • cszoltan
                    cszoltan @Jane Smith 0 last edited by

                    @Jane-Smith-0 Yes, he was just used by a Monkey! ๐Ÿ˜†
                    Have a great weekend Jane!

                    C.S.Zoltan
                    Portfolio: www.behance.net/cszoltan
                    Instagram: www.instagram.com/c.s.zoltan

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                    • cszoltan
                      cszoltan @baileyvidler last edited by

                      @baileymvidler I will reposition him, I think it will make much more sense that way and it will also balance the composition.
                      Right now it works under the Game of thrones logic, you have seemingly shallow river, but abruptly it goes several metres down ๐Ÿ˜†
                      Thank you, have a great weekend! ๐Ÿ‘

                      C.S.Zoltan
                      Portfolio: www.behance.net/cszoltan
                      Instagram: www.instagram.com/c.s.zoltan

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                      • cszoltan
                        cszoltan last edited by

                        @Jane-Smith-0 said in WIP - Bongo the monkey. Your Feedback is greatly appreciated.:

                        Clyde

                        Aloha Everyone, thank you for all of your amazing suggestion, here is the final result!

                        Illustration_Bongo_the_Monkey_Zoltan_Csomai_C.s.jpg

                        C.S.Zoltan
                        Portfolio: www.behance.net/cszoltan
                        Instagram: www.instagram.com/c.s.zoltan

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