Portfolio piece feedback please

[Kori Jensen]

I wonder how it'd look with a gently brushed in ray of sun in the background? or perhaps a gradient from bottom to top on you blue (again brushed in) I would love to try it myself

[Asyas_illos]

@Kori-Jensen I am new to digital illustration and I have been wanting to play with some lighting I may add a few rays...

[NessIllustration]

@powsupermum The colors seems a bit too flashy to me.. It's not too much of a problem with just the background, but when you paint on the mermaid I feel like the bg colors will fight for attention with her. She should be the most attention grabbing

[Asyas_illos]

@NessIllustration thank you for the feed back I mentioned earlier that I am really new at digital and it is extremely bright! lol I definitely agree! I usually like to work with a darker pallet but i figured a coral reef should be colorful but maybe I can figure out how to tone the whole thing down a bit? I am using procreate and I watched the video that @Will-Terry taught using procreate but his is an older software/ video and it seems to be a little different so I am slowly figuring it out! Thanks again I will be posting all my progress here so if you feel like checking back in please do so!

[Kori Jensen]

@powsupermum You're doing great, have you been drawing for long?

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@powsupermum hi! Looking great! Currently your piece is too centered. Perhaps move the mermaid to the left or right to hit that rule of thirds

[Asyas_illos]

@Kori-Jensen I have been drawing my whole life but only really started to hone my style/skill maybe the past year? I switched from acrylics and canvas and I really like watercolors too but I’m trying digital out at the moment. I really want to illustrate for children’s books but I’m afraid it won’t happen til my kids are bit older! they eat so much creative time but, I have to enjoy it while I can I know it won’t last forever!

[Asyas_illos]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz thank you for the feedback I’ll see if I can adjust itI have already erased some layers so it not be possible without lots of editing I had tried to move her already but it’s leaving behind its “shadow” so I’ll see what I can do! Thank you!

[Asyas_illos]

Here’s where I’m at now

[Asyas_illos]

Nope she can’t be moved I don’t know how to do it. It just creates a huge mess... I’ll just have live and learn rule of thirds!!

[Kori Jensen]

@powsupermum I know the feels I really do! I am a stay at home dad and I have been struggling to find the time too. Does your family support your artistic endeavours? if you don't mind me asking...

[Asyas_illos]

@Kori-Jensen oh yes but the kids don’t really get it yet. They are 2, 5, 7

[Kim Hunter]

Not sure why but the characters seem to dilute the focus point. Maybe fewer fish or blurry fish way in the background? Also the Y shaped, yellow coral on the left is creating a tangent and a window frame that pulls the attention. Maybe shorten the left branch of it.

[Asyas_illos]

@Kim-Hunter thanks for pointing that out I’ll fix it also I have added more fish and backgrounds fish as well I’ll post an update as soon as my iPad battery charges a bit!

[Asyas_illos]

Just gotta figure out a skin tone and tank color! Thanks to everyone for all the helpful advice I took as much as could into consideration! I’ll post the final soon

[Asyas_illos]

Ok all finished thanks again to everybody! It’s too late for changes but if anybody has any final thoughts I’m open to hear them still

[Kori Jensen]

@powsupermum yah mine are 2 and 4 lol

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@powsupermum hi! Great piece but you’re still not hitting that rule of thirds.

[Asyas_illos]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz yah I couldn’t make it happen with this one. moving the mermaid was not possible for me at this stage of the illustration and with my inexperience doing digital. Can only hope the next one I’ll make it!

[Michael Angelo Go]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz Does this help a bit you think?

Try to fit portions of the mermaid within the boundaries of these squares and she'll probably look very good. Like have the fin fit in the middle bottom square and the upper torso at the upper middle square.