@Jeremy-Ross , @aprilshin , @Neha-Rawat I enjoyed making both of them in different ways, but I'm more confident in the first being more appropriate to the challenge than the second. The tone of the short story doesn't gel with the second image I drew. It may be more visually interesting, but the short story seems to hinge so much on Bongo's confident fearlessness and wit (bordering on arrogance) that I feel like the second image just doesn't apply... The second image has more of a Jungle Book-vibe that speaks to danger a bit more. I don't ever feel Bongo is in much actual danger in the short story prompt--in fact, it seems he knew what he was doing all along...
I like option 3. I just feels more dynamic and uses the space really well.
I feel like in the first one the charcaters are hard to notice, might be a little small and the second one juat didn't click with me.
Good work tho
It's cute! I'd punch up the contrast a little in an editing program to bring out the line work and crop the top and the right side a little. Maybe it's my monitor, but it's looking a little washed out. Are you supposed to have the author's name included for the contest?
@TessaW thank you ever so much! The finish and presentation seems to be the common theme here
I definitely know where to take it from here. It also reminds me to clean up my Instagram from all the random scribbles I used to think was ok to post
I’m a fan of your work btw, it’s amazing! Xxx
Thank you again for your contribution
This is an awesome start. There are two things that stand out to me that could be adjusted.
"Oz" meets dorothy’s head in a way that makes a bit of an awkward tangent.
Solution: make the overlap heavier or don’t overlap at all by moving oz or making it smaller, similarly you could move Dorothy a bit instead.
Between the city and character bubbles in the corners there are tangents.
Solution: make the city wider so it doesn’t end at the bubbles but continues behind them. This will make the city feel more open and grand
Hope this helps!
Also if you really want to push yourself to finish this piece maybe try telling us when you are going to post next and what stage it will be at. For example, say your line drawing will be done in 3 days or maybe your first color layer
Back as promised, but with a completely new sketch! (It took a lot longer than I thought. It's really hard to get a clean drawing of a messy room )
My questions are:
Is the story clear? (I'll clarify the flippers and goggles in the refined drawing.)
I elongated the canvas horizontally so that the figures could be stretched enough have a hard time handing off a stuffed animal. Is it too long? Would you crop it anywhere?
Are the values working in order to draw your attention to the right focal points?
Anything else amiss? (I may keep working with the toys, especially those on the floor, but have at it.)
Thank you!! I really hope to move on to the finish with this soon!
Ok! Major break through. I put my pencil down and started doing research and thinking more and more about what kind of design do i want to use in my comic? I kept trying to reinvent the wheel and ended up covering up parts of my art with masses of ink or lots of hatching.
So ive been researching 1950s designs because i really like that aesthetic, color palette, architecture, even their ridiculous retro futuristic designs for space ships. And i can recognize it better. Art nouveau is too much for me to understand and too difficult for me to be able to design into something practical design wise without spending too much time with it. So im going simple.
For architectural designs i think the best way i can explain the inspiration is with this image:
For cars and trains and stuff this vibe:
I think clothing will pose the toughest challenge because im not super great at clothing even after taking the clothing drawing class (might take it again)
But having something concrete will be way easier to go off of.
@Kevin-Longueil - lovely to get your message. Don’t worry at all about the accidental down vote thing , as long as I haven’t offended anyone I’m happy! It’s such a supportive and constructive forum. To be honest, I’m not really sure how we’re meant to make use of the up and down vote thing! If anyone knows please tell me. Are we meant to upvote all who reply to us in helpful way or every post we like in general? I’ve tended to reply in person to people but kind of forgot about the upvoting and I’ve mainly been upvoting the entries I liked in the contest, I’m just not sure how to use them in general! I’ll start up voting more now I know more about it! Geez, how clueless am I?
@TessaW thanks for your input! Good advice on Belle. I kept reworking her face today and not done yet but getting there.
Beast I wanted hunched sort of, good to know it looks like shoulder shrugging not hunched, I'll work on figuring that out too