Serious Feedback Requested on FEB prompt and probably need to be talked down from the tree....
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Chris your entry is already a great portfolio piece which is the ultimate goal. I do completely understand the frustration, I have had several pieces that were not picked which most of the time doesn’t bother me, but the October prompt had so few entries and I felt like I was definitely going to make top 16. Not only did I not make top 16 I wasn’t mentioned in the extra 14 or so honorable mentions so I didn’t even make top 60%. I was so crushed I didn’t participate in the next one.
But the thing is I keep improving. I can see how much I have actually improved and I can see it in your work too. Winning would be great but your already getting great clients (which is way better than winning an SVS contest. Just keep going. Your already a professional win or not.
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@Asyas_illos I'm sorry about that... Your concept for yeti house was way cooler than mine !!
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@chrisaakins I can totally relate on your frustration... Your style is sweet, it makes me wanna smile and share the happiness of that little chef. You're a professionnal artist and that matters a lot. Paramount chose you, not one of the winner! I really love how you render your pieces. I love the way you choose your colors too!
If I may, though, I wonder if maybe with different proportions, your art would have been in the top 16. I feel like you gave too much space and attention to the text and not enough to the main character... Also, the yeti is about the same size as your smoke and I feel like I wanna see more the yeti and his happy face. I'm pretty sure Will would have say "your yeti is standard size, we wanna see very bug or very small but not an in beetween size". I sure hear Lee too, wanting your yeti to have more rythm (he's so happy, and maybe you may have enhance this happiness with more curves). I'm not sure that I can give more advice, your piece is already beautiful and deserving to go straight to your portfolio!
I don't know if it's ok (if not, I can suppress my image, let me know), I allow myself to move around your proportions and enhancing your initial gesture... Hope it'll help you with your frustration, that's a horrible feeling...
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@chrisaakins Hi Chris! you make great work and you have a great style. I'm sure the guys also see that as well. However, I can see a few issues with this piece.
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The yeti looks like he's pouring the secret spice on to himself. Solution: Move out his hand further from his body.
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The Yeti is drawn too straight on. Personally, I would draw him in 3/4 view.
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Personally, I would also like to exaggerate the Yeti's pose more. I love what you did with his pinky. it's a good rule of thumb to imagine the character as a silhouette. If you can tell what the character is doing just by the silhouette, then the pose is clear.
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Lastly, this is purely based on my taste but since this is a Yeti piece, I feel that you missed a great opportunity to experiment with the concept. The current story is good but a bit too common. It would be fun if you added some crazy detail to it. Like what if the "secret" ingredient is made up of crushed up pixies and you had a cage full of pixies in the corner or something just as outlandish.
I hope this was helpful. Below is a quick sketch I made.
Don't get discouraged, you make great art and you have made huge improvements too!
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The only critique I can really think of on the artwork might be the shadows, The flames on the cauldron I think would light up the front of his body more.
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Hi @chrisaakins, the strain is good! This is the improvement process and you will continue to grow with each piece.
After entering the contests 16 months in a row, I have been lucky to be selected 1 time for the sweet 16 and made honorable mention 3 times (almost made the cut).
What I’ve learned personally is that I’m trying my best with the skills that I have and with whatever free time I have after long days of work and being a father and husband.
To me, just pushing myself to complete the piece in my style is already a win. I know it sounds lame, but I detach from my art and never expect to make it in the sweet 16.
Expectations lead to disappointment.
Regarding critique, I do like your style and you definitely have great drawing skills. I agree with the comments provided by others, especially the Yeti size and not looking like a typical Yeti.
I thought I was being clever with my Yeti girl looking different, but I was way off. Nevertheless, I stuck with my character design through the 3 pieces for cohesion.
Here’s what I recommend:
- Keep doing your best work
- Request WIP feedback
- Post your submission
- Detach from likes
- Let go of any expectations
Remember, the challenges are extremely tough! If you were winning them, you wouldn’t be growing.
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I think @Nyrryl-Cadiz hit the nail on the head. Most of the issues I see with this are silhouette based. I always at some point convert my image to solid shapes to make sure that things aren't blending together. This is especially important with a spot illo (I think, take all advice with grain of salt, lol)
That being said, I know how you feel. I've made up a few entries that I really REALLY liked, but they didn't hit the top 16. Sometimes they don't hit the mark and we can't see why because we're too close.
I don't think it has anything to do with the judges liking one style over another (although I'm sure they all have different tastes). Sometimes entries simply don't make it past the first rough sort
I'll take breaks between challenges (unless it's one I REALLY like) and I find it recharges my batteries and lets me grow a little between entries. If you're feeling frustrated it may be time for a short breather before getting back into the ring
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@Gaelle-Grizzly don’t be silly! like I said it was an honor both to make it to the top and to be paired next to yours! I just knew I was going down lol! I love your stuff!
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Wow! You guys are the best. I am overwhelmed with good feeling toward everyone. I really appreciate the very detailed descriptions of what could be improved. I appreciate the draw overs especially because I am very visual and they help so much.
I would tag all of you in my thanks but I am afraid I will leave someone out. I also appreciate the reminders that I need to be working for me rather than to get approval from some guys who don’t really even know me. I thank you for the words of affirmation regarding my style. I have been really working hard towards developing a clear distinguishable style that people like. It was nice to hear, ya know?
@Asyas_illos
@jdubz
@K-Flagg
@Gaelle-Grizzly
@Nyrryl-Cadiz
@Shelley-James-0
@Jeremy-Ross
@Braden-HallettThanks again!
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@chrisaakins I do understand what you are saying here and we sypathize. I wish all of them could make it to the top 16.
What people have said here in terms of a crit is fairly accurate to what Will and I debated about your piece. The pose of character being too straight on and symmetrical with the arms was the main things. Look to some animation books on creating a better gesture to get more emotion across. If I filled your character in with sharpie, it would just be leaning a bit to one side, there would be no emotion from the pose. I agree with what @Nyrryl-Cadiz said about the pose silhouette. I also agree with the things @Gaelle-Grizzly said and liked the scale change to the smoke. The pose of the head could be tweaked to a much more expressive 3/4 view and be clearer in design. That nose up pose is really hard to do head on and have it look right. The only character I've ever seen done really well in that pose is snoopy. I will add that your style is fine! It's storytelling and gesture that you need to work on.
Like I said, I understand the frustration of entering and not getting in. BUT, I will say that is part of the training too! Next weeks podcast is about "dealing with constant failure" and one thing we talk about is that this industry has a MASSIVE amount of it. When I would send out 1000 postcards and get 2 replies, it was tough to deal with. Then I'd send out ANOTHER 1000 and get 1 reply. And then I'd send out another 1000, and another, and another. It really is a numbers game. You can't judge your successes in a single entry situation like a contest. If you do, you are GUARANTEED to feel disappointed. The real goal should be 1. Do work that you like and is your best. 2. Put it out in the world. 3. Repeat. And that is it. That is all you can do. Of course that doesnt mean that you shouldnt try to keep getting better, etc. It just means that you know you are going to make thousands of images. So just keep your head down and produce the best work you can.
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@Lee-White Thank you for taking time out to respond to my post. I apologize for sounding so pouty. I see now more what you were looking for especially after the comments by @Nyrryl-Cadiz and @Gaelle-Grizzly. I took your advice to heart and did the sharpie thing to my entry for this month and it really does make a difference. Hopefully my March piece will show much improvement! Thank you for the words of encouragement!
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@Asyas_illos that was the part I was going to review and would like to understand better. They mentioned that people generally did a good job with the spot illustration, so I thought that was why they didn't talk about it! I felt like we got that right as a group, that was kind of nice.
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@carolinebautista that is very true. In terms of designing the spot, everyone did great! Much better than I did the first time I tried it!
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@Lee-White I just have to say its really awesome how often you chime in on the forums Lee. It makes a really big difference to have your imput directly. Thanks you for doing that
K.Flagg
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@K-Flagg My pleasure! I love to see what you guys post in the forums. I think the community here is so cool!
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@carolinebautista Exactly! I would give up a spot for just a critique.
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@chrisaakins just wanted to offer some support and say I feel your frustration! I got really frustrated one month after I worked so hard on my piece to make something more detailed than anything I'd ever done and didn't make it but a piece was chosen that looked very naive and simple in a child-like style. It made me realise I was maybe barking up the wrong tree with children's books as my work isn't loose enough. The prompts became more enjoyable when I put the focus on them as a brief to help build my portfolio, rather than a competition.
