Trying to improve on dummy composition. Feedback please!
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@Ace-Connell Thank you! I replied below instead of to you directly because I wasn't thinking but, now you will see it
How old is your daughter? I have a 2 year old grandson.
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I'm not very good at composition, but the thing I notice right away is that the bathroom in the bottom picture makes much more sense as far as size goes. The bathroom in the top looks absolutely enormous (probaby because there are no wall in sight). But, the bottom looks like a much more realistic size. And, I think that's important. Obviously we all know that mice don't use bathrooms. This is a children's book so we expect to see fantastical things, but when the details like that are well thought out, its easier for me to buy the story. Its less distracting. Does that make sense?
Also, nice job, tackling a bathroom scene. It seems like and incredibly challenging thing to do. I remember a book called "The Amazing Voyage of Jackie Grace" I think, by Faulkner?? Its a kid in a tub and turns into pirates and and seas and all kinds of fun. It might be a good reference for bathroom and tub scenes. -
@Pamela-Fraley Thanks, Pamela! The creative composition class is responsible for the great changes made and feedback from others which I so appreciate!
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@Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen I made the squares a bit too short horizontally in comparison to the pages I have in the dummy book.
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It'd probably be something along these lines
My daughter's 4. She's awesome
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@Ace-Connell Thanks Ace! I kind of did the same thing. I've gone through the whole dummy again and made changes as I go through the Craetive Composition class. I'll post again later when I have more improvement. I'm very happy for you having your awesome daughter. Kids are great. So glad I am a mom AND a grandma!! I'm going to leave you alone for awhile and take charge of my project until I feel I have more to share. Thanks again!!!!! BTW, I went to your website and loved seeing your caricatures:-) Do you have any other art posed somewhere?