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    • AngelinaKizz
      AngelinaKizz @ACPetullo last edited by

      @ACPetullo thankyou! Can you see anything that I can improve upon in the layout?

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

        @AngelinaKizz cute idea though at this stage I can’t tell what the thing is she is trying cover. Also that character in the background is a little distracting maybe moving him elsewhere in the image so our eyes can move around a bit more?

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        • AngelinaKizz
          AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

          @Asyas_illos great! I’ll play with moving his around.
          The little guy to the bottom right will be a soggy wet dog.

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

            @AngelinaKizz ok that’s what I thought but wasn’t 100%

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            • AngelinaKizz
              AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos I tried moving the dude around, and nothing quite feels cohesive. But I think if I drop him into shadow, that will take away the draw to him.

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              • AngelinaKizz
                AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

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                Maybe it does make the eye travel better? He’ll still be dropped into the background more as I flesh out the values. What do you think of this placement instead?

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                  @AngelinaKizz no I think he’s still taking up too much attention. The focal point is the girl and her dog right? Right now he is competing for the focal point. Maybe just fade him back more like the rest of the background?

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                    @AngelinaKizz I would take him out and maybe give him his own illustration cuz I do like him as a stand alone character, I love the classic newspaper over the head gag.

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                    • AngelinaKizz
                      AngelinaKizz last edited by

                      I tried David’s technique of using mask layers to lay out the values first, and then color over. I’m not sure how I feel about where it’s at.

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                      • Kristen Lango
                        Kristen Lango @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                        @AngelinaKizz Lovely colors in the puddles and I like your depiction of rain a lot. One thing that stands out at me is the size of the dog - he's awfully small in comparison to the girl who I can only assume is also a short/small child.

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                        • AngelinaKizz
                          AngelinaKizz @Kristen Lango last edited by

                          @Kristen-Lango ooooh greatpoint! I made him small because a wet dog usually ends up looking rather rat like but you’re right, in comparison to the girl and her parents shoe, he’s much too small. I’ll have to work on that. Thanks!

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                          • Lisa Clark
                            Lisa Clark @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                            @AngelinaKizz It seems like in that situation she would be looking at the dog but it looks like she is looking off into the distance. I think more interaction between the two characters would be nice.

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                            • AngelinaKizz
                              AngelinaKizz @Lisa Clark last edited by

                              @Lisa-Clark thankyou! It can only get better with a rework!

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                              • Melissa_Bailey
                                Melissa_Bailey @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                @AngelinaKizz hi! Hope I'm not too late to reply and mess up your flow.

                                To answer your questions: yes, the story is clear. The girl's expression is so sweet! The pup does indeed look forlorn.

                                Is it too cliche? To be completely honest, this is an illustration concept I've seen before. Even in this forum, @Asyas_illos posted a similar composition and illustration (but the dog was substituted with an old lady).

                                Here are a few illustrations to compare (and one stock image). If you're looking to steer away from cliche, you may want to explore unique spins on this concept.

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                                55031748-fb02-4d03-92f7-d5ee9a16c61a-little-girl-and-dog-under-umbrella-makiko.jpg

                                e9376b85-7adb-467f-9a91-a52f96f5f4cd-happy-woman-walking-with-cute-dog-under-drawing_csp91753090.jpg

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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    @Melissa-Bailey yep I lost steam with that one I really loved my background but wasn’t feeling the story.

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                                    • AngelinaKizz
                                      AngelinaKizz @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

                                      @Melissa_Bailey

                                      Thankyou so much! Never too late! I love all of the references you sent, but yes I can see the too cliche for sure! I’m going to keep thumb nailing and trying to decide on a story. Something good will come from lots of trial and error :). Thanks for such a thoughtful reply!

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                                      • Melissa_Bailey
                                        Melissa_Bailey @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                        @AngelinaKizz you’re so welcome! Glad you found it helpful. Looking forward to seeing what you come up with…it’s a deceptively challenging prompt!

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                                        • AngelinaKizz
                                          AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                          New start to storm. Super super rough, but I’d love some thoughts. You guys are so great to bounce ideas with.

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                                          • Holumpa
                                            Holumpa @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                            @AngelinaKizz The storm looks super cool. Really strong and turbulent, I can really feel it!
                                            I am not sure if I get the story, angels or fairies bowling in the sky at a birthday event? So if they hit the pins they create storm by that? Sorry if i get it wrong.I think the composition and atmosphere already workso well.

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