Running in from the Storm May WIP
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I like the story you’re going with I’m not sure if it’s the story you want to go with, but you might have him actually carrying a chicken – saving a chicken – so he can be a hero.
Pull those hero heartstrings.
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I like this idea and the setting quite a bit. The thing that strikes me is that the chickens have more dynamism than the boy -- his running posture doesn't look as aggressive as theirs. Could you make him lean more?
I think the color palette is very Wizard of Oz/Kansas looking and really works.
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@chrisaakins yes, breaking those strong vertical and horizontal lines will improve the composition. Another chicken or a cow/horse/goat poking its head around to look out at the storm might improve the storytelling and composition even more. You might also consider cropping the canvas to eliminate that super strong horizontal line of the top of the barn door. We don't need it to know that this is a barn door. There is enough information with the door itself, the animals, and the farm tools.
You mentioned the boy's expression, wondering if it reads "aughh, the rain's hitting me in the face!" For me, it doesn't. His emotion is hard to read, especially as he's staring straight ahead. But there's a huge bolt of lightning hitting the house/tree. Wouldn't he notice that? Isn't that a main element of this illustration? Why not have him looking over his shoulder at the storm and reacting to it?
In short, my suggestion is: add one more animal to the upper right to break that strong vertical line, crop the top of the doorframe out, and have the boy turning his head to look at the storm and react to it. That will bring even more dynamism and clarity to your illustration.
Great work!
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@Melissa_Bailey Well…I wasn’t really trying to draw the lightning hitting the tree just a basic ole background bolt of lightning that would send you running especially when I the sky starts dropping those big wet drops that splash your face. I imagine the kid whooping and yelling at the chickens to get in the barn. I changed his eyes to be more squinted shut and @demotlj I angled him a bit to get more dynamism. I also angled the frame with my wife’s permission @AngelinaKizz ! I also added a wagon wheel to break the box and give more depth. I hesitate to draw more animals because I don’t want the viewer drawn to the animals more than the boy. @KevinTreaccar While I like the idea of him carrying a chicken, I don’t think that would be realistic. Can you imagine catching a chicken right when it’s coming up a storm? Yeah, you are going to get wet and irritate the chicken. Haha!
So maybe at this point I am really liking it and wouldn’t mind a few words of affirmation. It’s been a hard day at work and a bit of encouragement might do this old soul some good. (how’s that for a sob story?)
I really appreciate all the critique and helps though. If you see a deal breaker, let me know.
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@chrisaakins I really like what you did with the door frame! Looks awesome, I’d love an old brick barn one day
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@chrisaakins I love your concept. It's very dramatic moment and there's lots of movement and expression. Great work!!!
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@chrisaakins I think this turned out great! So much movement and sense of intensity.
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More progress. I finished one chicken and added a barn cat, because why not? Actually I think it helps convey a sense of warmth and safety since he is so languid and dilatory. (SAT prep vocabulary, check!) also, I am avoiding bricks because it is so tedious…
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@chrisaakins I like the addition of the wheel too nice contrast to the squareness, breaks it up nicely
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Here is the final version.
