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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

      @Griffin thanks I like that one too

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      • Griffin McPherson
        Griffin McPherson @Asyas_illos last edited by

        @Asyas_illos I actually really love the background hillside. I think in general your sketchyness isn’t a problem. The areas I feel like it might be a bit of an issue is just around the base of the tree where there’s a lot of those little sketchy streaks of grass overlapping with the the tree and the same with the lighter grass by the road and the darker grass behind it. That bit could just be a value contract thing more so than a blending issue though

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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

          @Griffin gotcha I’ll look into adding some shadows around there maybe 🤔

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          • ann-nadine
            ann-nadine @Asyas_illos last edited by

            @Asyas_illos amazing work, I love the texture and the palette choice. I think you might need a little bit of contrast as @Griffin said and I also think Glinda and munchkins would work. Great choice, I love the Wizard of Oz 🙂

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            • kirsten-mcg
              kirsten-mcg last edited by

              I love the Oz books! I definitely recommend them as reads if you haven't. They are so funny and full of fun, quirky characters. I love your idea of using different characters. The sawhorse was always one of my favorites. Not sure if he was in the movie or not, because I haven't seen it! 😅 But I generally agree with everyone else about @Asyas_illos thumbnails. Ozma's shape works great! As far as the sketchiness, I really like the way it looks in the tree and background. It helps it to recede. Maybe consider cleaning up the foreground a little to help it come forward more? I love the way you rendered the bricks on the road in the foreground, and would love to see something similar happen with Dorothy and the bushes and rocks in the foreground.

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @kirsten-mcg last edited by

                @kirsten-mcg I am definitely going to get the set I have always wanted to read the rest of them but I wanted to read them with my kids unfortunately right now I think they’re a bit to advanced for littles.

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                  Here is another piece I’m working on I was trying to make a spot illo but I’ve been going crazy with environment design and I got a little carried away. Still pretty rough minus the tree, which will have foliage and sort circle everything back around.
                  I have two directions for red unsure about which to move forward with…
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                  • kirsten-mcg
                    kirsten-mcg @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos I love the design in this one! There's so much movement!

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos @kirsten-mcg last edited by

                      @kirsten-mcg thanks!

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                      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos this is looking awesome

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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                          @Nyrryl-Cadiz thank you 😊

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                          • Melissa_Bailey
                            Melissa_Bailey @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @Asyas_illos really nice lines in this one! I like how the wolf and tree contrast but have the same lines and movement. Really nice.

                            But why not really lean into the curving lines? The horizontal lines of the horizon and tree branch are breaking up that circular movement, interrupting the flow. There are also a lot of lines leading off the left side of the page and nothing to bring the eye back in.

                            Hope you don't mind -- I did a drawover to demonstrate just one way you could adjust the composition by leaning into the curving lines. I added more color, too, as it helps me put all the pieces together in a composition. Not sure if this is even the palette you're going for ... is she going to be Little Blue Riding Hood? That could be a cool spin on the tale!

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                            Anyway, hope this helps. 😊

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                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

                              @Melissa_Bailey haha no they won’t be blue just like it to sketch out characters and work around compositional elements. Thanks I do like draw overs it’s helps me to see from others pov and and think of things I may not have seen otherwise. I like all the curves but I’m still unsure if I want to use a background in this one I don’t have many spot illustrations for my portfolio. That being said maybe I could both… just keep the background on a separate layer. Thanks Melissa!

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                              • Melissa_Bailey
                                Melissa_Bailey @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                @Asyas_illos you're so welcome! I think it could be really nice without a background, or maybe an out-of-focus, painterly background. That will keep the focus on the contrasting characters. 👍

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                                • Jeremy Ross
                                  Jeremy Ross @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                  Hi @Asyas_illos, I like C the best. Looking good!

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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                                    @Jeremy-Ross awesome thanks Jeremy!

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                                    • Asyas_illos
                                      Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      Still chipping at this one
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                                      • Asyas_illos
                                        Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                                        Think I’m done with this one😊
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                                        • MelissaJacie
                                          MelissaJacie @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                          @Asyas_illos I like this background tree branch! Nice work there! Inspiring.

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                                          • Asyas_illos
                                            Asyas_illos @MelissaJacie last edited by

                                            @MelissaJacie thank you!

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