My Rabbit Road Race WIP

kirsten-mcg

@KevinTreaccar The clouds definitely lend an ominous feel to the piece. I would go with them if that's what you're going for. The sunny day (A) feels lighter though, if you're wanting to keep the mood a little lighter.

Sarah VanDam

Hey, just read through all this. I like it! It’s a simple, clear concept. I have just a couple ideas in case you have time to implement them (I hope you have a great vacation!). One, I’d just darken some of the shadows, and sharpen the edges, at least towards the base of the objects they extend from, like the tires. Two, add lightning and glaring headlights? And three—if possible, add some onlookers, which can add more to the acting and the story. ![alt text]

KevinTreaccar

@Griffin Thank you. And good catch on the hill/sky value. I darkened the hills along the way but never checked the black and white/value again.

KevinTreaccar

@kirsten-mcg Yes, was going for some ominous-ness with the clouds. Glad that’s coming across. And thanks. Will play with the sky color to be ominous but not Mad Max Fury Road-ish.

KevinTreaccar

@Sarah-VanDam Love this. Thank you. Definitely going to try to work this in.

Quick question about the shadow you added below the car. It has that colored pencil texture I’ve been trying to find. Are you using a standard Photoshop brush and single stroking that? Or are you using a specific brush or texture brush?

(Sorry, been playing with things to look like coloring with colored pencil or crayon, but haven’t figured it out yet)

Sarah VanDam

Yeah—I was using the 6B pencil Procreate brush. I like using soft pencil textures.

KevinTreaccar

@Sarah-VanDam Agreed. Cool. Good to know. Thanks.

KevinTreaccar

Think I have this in a good place. Plan to post it in the morning unless someone sees something I have time to fix.

Thank you all for the amazing help.

aurelia

This is soooo good! I really like it, very clear story and great prop design! You nailed the expression on point! Well Done!

ArtMelC

@KevinTreaccar What a great story! I hope you have time for my 2 cents:

Tangent on the back wheel is throwing me off an otherwise lovely composition. If you have time, pushing the back tire inwards a little will I think solidify the silhouette a bit more. See my quick drawover below
I really want to give the enthusiastic spectator rabbit a race flag to wave. Just for some extra storytelling element.

Other than that, fantastic job!

KevinTreaccar

@aurelia Thank you!

KevinTreaccar

@KevinTreaccar Thank you! Good catch and good solution on that back tire. And I can’t promise a race flag, but a flag with a specific word on it will get across what he’s yelling without a dialog bubble (Don’t worry, I’ll keep it PG-rated).

KevinTreaccar

Thank you all, again! Time to start packing. Good luck, everyone!

Valerie Light

@KevinTreaccar lol, DOOM.

KevinTreaccar

I want to say thank you again to everyone who helped me during July and gave feedback. Your help boosted me to my first Top 16. I’m floored. Thank you so so much.

KathrynAdebayo

@KevinTreaccar You deserve it! You took your work to a new level. It takes dedication to take advice and make adjustments, and I love seeing what comes of people taking suggestions and striving for the most excellent form of what they're capable of.

ArtMelC

@KevinTreaccar Lovely! You had a strong concept in the first place and push that forward with your willingness to seek improvement. Well done