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    Advice please: The rabbit image has finally made progress :D

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    • randarrington
      randarrington @AngelinaKizz last edited by

      @AngelinaKizz Thank you for your advice. The original drawing did have the watch chain and it does add a great deal of movement. I'll add that back into the final. I think I do need to emphasis the hand (holding the watch) and its anatomy more clearly. I'm not sure if the fingers breaking in perspective is being read. I think that's due to the fir....but I can play with that.

      Thank you very much!!!!

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      • randarrington
        randarrington @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

        @Chantal-Goetheer I agree. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

        Thank you very much!!!!!!!

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        • randarrington
          randarrington @Mia Clarke last edited by

          @Mia-Clarke I think so too...but it was certainly worth checking. I did have the rabbit in more of a vertical position originally but you never know. simple to check it ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

          Thank you for you help!!!!

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          • randarrington
            randarrington last edited by

            Can I ask how everyone feels about the color? Is it lean too much toward the grey tones toward the background and then goes dark too quickly? How dies the ridges in the tree directly behind the rabbit read? I almost thing it'd be better to use larger shapes not the ridged bark look. That would create other large shapes in the design. That's one of my fears actually is that I've not payed attention to the large shapes in my zeal to get into the drawing and the detail. How about the contrast? I'm trying together the rabbit to be the focus. Does that work here?

            Thanks again everyone!!!! I really appreciate your thoughts

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            • willicreate
              willicreate last edited by willicreate

              @randarrington If you cover the face of the watch it may reduce the viewer's ability to recognize the object as a pocket watch; especially for the younger audience.

              I wouldnโ€™t be too concerned with people interpreting the image differently than your intention. While I agree about the issue of how the paw is holding the watch, I do like the initial hand position. The rabbit looks as though it is presenting the watch to me, directly communicating, "Get out of the way! Look at the time. I'm late. I'm late."

              The posture as it currently stands is great.

              The environment looks convienently spaced around the rabbit, oppose to the character navigating the landscape. For example, the tree behind the rabbit is bending at a 30 degree, but no roots sticking out of the ground or growing on the path and not chopped to create the path. The root underneath the rabbit bends safely away from tripping it. The grass undisturbed. I think the composition would benefit if both the character and the environment reacted to one another.

              Shouldn't the coat end be behing the left tree trunk?

              As for the colors, I did think there were too much blacks. Have you considered subsitute black with color to simulate color casts and tints. Something like a N.C. Wyeth illustration. However, one can argue the 'real world' are greys and blacks and Wonderland is in technicolor.

              I'm not sure what to say about the ridges. It depends on your style. Do you want to go for a realistic, photographic look or more impressionist? Your question made me think of the illustrator Chris Buzelli. He's very detail oriented, but not a hyper-realist. Take a look at his execution.

              I do like the quality of the digital piece. It'll be an awesome painting.

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              • Chantal Goetheer
                Chantal Goetheer @randarrington last edited by

                @randarrington personally I like the ridges. It still feels like a big tree to me, and the ridges just give it texture and make it more like a tree. It also fits how the rabbit is textured. The white of his head certainly catches attention first. The dark blue of the coat, especially the arm holding the watch, fades a bit into the tree. Maybe making the tree, what it alrea What @willicreate says about the interaction with the environment and the colour is a good point.

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                • Jeremy Ross
                  Jeremy Ross @randarrington last edited by

                  Hi @randarrington, I think itโ€™s great. I would go ahead and paint it!

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                  • randarrington
                    randarrington @willicreate last edited by

                    @willicreate Good insight on the environment details and treatment. I'll address that in the final piece. Thank you for that.

                    If you look at the first image...the coat is slightly behind the tree. (I didn't take the time with the edits to worry about it) It's a little bit of tangent and I could pull that left tree in closing in the space which would force the coat to appear behind the tree and helping with the environment looking more integrated. Thank you for that too ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

                    I felt it was too dark as well. Part of the problem is Procreate and how it handles color...it came over the the MacBook really dark. So I did adjust that to be closer to what I was seeing on the iPad. Still feels darker to me than the original source. I'll certainly keep that in mind when doing the final.

                    Thank you so much!!!!! You've been very insightful.

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                    • randarrington
                      randarrington @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

                      @Chantal-Goetheer I may do a quick version using more shapes on that tree just to see. I feel like I'm entirely too anal LOL.

                      The arm fade is intentional. I love lost shape and edge. I'd really like to have pushed that further but...I'm afraid it would have made it tougher to read. Especially since this is utterly fictional and I don't have any reality to leverage for the shapes and gestures.

                      Thank you so much for you input!!!!! Great insights!!!!

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                      • randarrington
                        randarrington @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                        @Jeremy-Ross Thank you Jeremy!!!! I'm getting anxious to drop some paint ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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