Critiques Please! Assignment #2 - Developing Great Visual Stories
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One more thumbnail trying to blend 1 and 3 together and I’ve included the text as well. I like this one but am open to tweaks to make it more effective before I go into the rough sketch phase.
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@skeletortoise Great! I can definitely tell now that the tree is big and the child is reacting.
Just throwing some additional thoughts out, feel free to ignore:- Should the tree be closer to the house? or maybe be surrounded by more failed plants? At the moment it feels like that specific plant was put further away specially, as if it was expected that it needed more space.
- Oh, that's it. I have no more thoughts.
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Just finished! The assignment is for a “rough sketch” so I think that about does it for this one. I like this one a lot better than the first one I did.
Please feel free to leave feedback if you have it. Thanks to everyone who helped me with this assignment!
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So you’ve changed your mind at the end
Very nice work! It was really interesting to see you explore different solutions. -
@skeletortoise Nice!! I think this vantage point works really, really well for telling the story of a tree that’s grown very suddenly. If you were to ever take this further, I’d just think it would be cool to maybe show the tree doing things like smashing through a window, pushing on a chimney, or lifting up a car or something with its roots.
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@skeletortoise Yes! Brilliant! Very effective with the houses close by and the tree outgrowing the space, plus the fun point of view with the child and his reaction.
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@Sarah-VanDam yes I was playing around with the idea of the tree breaking something, maybe even starting in the house and breaking through the roof! Thanks for the comment!
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@Robyn-Hepburn thanks so much! I'm glad it's working
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I think the zoomed in images are really capturing the feeling you want to convey!
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if this is meant to be part of a picture book, just keep in mind if you want it to be one page or a two page spread, because if it is for two pages then you don't want important stuff in the middle where it will get cut.
