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    • tombarrettillo
      tombarrettillo @menalkhan last edited by

      @menalkhan Your art in my unprofessional opinion is ready to go. Your color choices and character designs are excellent.

      I will say, however, based on what Jake, Will, and Lee have said in the past, is to be sure your illustrations have a clear story. I think the boy dreaming of his vacation and the monkey photos are there, but some of the others could be improved. For example, while most would recognize that as the story of Matilda, why is she in trouble in this specific illustration? With the duck and the bear, who are they and where did the slime come from? Why is the princess sad (Rapunzel?)? Don't just rely on people to know the stories to understand the art. And I love the tuk tuk with the chickens, but how much more fun that might be if they were driving it!

      I don't believe you need to redo all the illustrations in your portfolio, but perhaps 2 or 3 key ones might make your story-telling abilities even more clear to potential clients/agents. And either put those at the top, or mix them in more rather than having them all at the bottom of the page.

      And a few details on your site I noticed. The text is very choppy and rough. I would fix/change that to make everything more readable. Also, consider making your social links a bit larger if you can.

      https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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      • menalkhan
        menalkhan @tombarrettillo last edited by menalkhan

        @tombarrettillo - Thank you so much for the detailed feedback!!
        -Rapunzel - Great point! I added bars + lock to her window to emphasize her sadness from being trapped.
        -Tuktuk - Since I already have a piece with a vehicle in motion, I wanted to show this tuktuk as idle, with chickens taking advantage of the space. To further show this I added a chicken reading inside.
        -Matilda - I'll think more about this one! It was initially meant to be the front cover but at the end I decided against it.
        -Duck and bear - They're detectives and I had the badge on the duck to show this but I realize now it may have been too hidden, so I made it more visible. I've kept the 'why the slime' reasoning vague to enhance the mystery theme. I also made a few more changes but have made a separate post on that.
        -Website edits - Thanks for pointing out the choppy font! I’ve updated it to something more readable.

        https://www.menalkhan.com/
        Connect with me → https://linktr.ee/menalkhan

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        • tombarrettillo
          tombarrettillo @menalkhan last edited by tombarrettillo

          @menalkhan I like the reading chicken; adds much more story to the piece. And the duck and bear piece is more clear.

          If I can be so bold, I would say that the Rapunzel piece, while the bars are good, might do better if you zoomed out a bit so that the reader could see that she is actually in a tower and not a palace. I would go so far as to remove the parapet, but will leave that up to you.

          And good on the website. Text is much more readable.

          I think you have a great style and should do well as an illustrator. 👍

          https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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            AnthonyWheeler last edited by

            Hey! Lovely portfolio, style, compositions, colors, etc!

            Here's my thought--don't wait for permission, just make things happen.

            Perhaps you spend a bunch of time getting things "perfect" and then no one looks at your stuff. Perhaps you spend a bunch of time getting things "perfect" and editors/agents think your stuff needs work. Perhaps, perhaps, perhaps...

            Your work is of a professional quality--go get after it. As you get going, continue to take advice you are getting here, seek reviews, make your work stronger, etc.

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            • menalkhan
              menalkhan @AnthonyWheeler last edited by

              @tombarrettillo Thank you! I'll rethink that piece. Appreciate the feedback!

              @AnthonyWheeler That's the plan! Thank you for the awesome advice!

              https://www.menalkhan.com/
              Connect with me → https://linktr.ee/menalkhan

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              • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @menalkhan last edited by

                @menalkhan hi! first off great illustrations. Secondly, is it alright if I critiqued your portfolio? thanks.

                Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                • menalkhan
                  menalkhan @menalkhan last edited by

                  @Nyrryl-Cadiz - Thank you! And yes, go for it, I'd love feedback!

                  https://www.menalkhan.com/
                  Connect with me → https://linktr.ee/menalkhan

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                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @menalkhan last edited by

                    @menalkhan hi I'm just gonna keep it brief. I think you have a good style going and I would definitely recommend making submissions. I always recommend submitting even if you're not ready so that you'll get over the fear of rejection because that fear is very strong and paralyzing. A lot of illustrators give up before they even get started because of that fear. And boy, will you inevitably experience a lot of rejection during this process. that's just a given.

                    what I think you need to work on most is adding sequential illustrations. if you want to illustrate books or narrative works, you need to show that you can illustrate the same character consistently over various illustrations.

                    overall, this is my 2 cents. all the best. keep us posted.

                    Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                    Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                    YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                    • menalkhan
                      menalkhan @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by menalkhan

                      @Nyrryl-Cadiz - Yes! I've actually been working on a sequential piece. Initially, I had the chimp-polaroid image to show the same character in different poses, but decided to make one that's a bit more obvious. Thank you for the feedback, it's very much appreciated! ☺
                      I submitted myself to a few places and actually signed an agent this past week, excited to see where this takes me.

                      https://www.menalkhan.com/
                      Connect with me → https://linktr.ee/menalkhan

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                      • tombarrettillo
                        tombarrettillo @menalkhan last edited by

                        @menalkhan congrats on getting an agent!

                        https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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                        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @menalkhan last edited by

                          @menalkhan woah! that's wonderful news! congratulations who did you sign with?

                          Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                          Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                          YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                          • menalkhan
                            menalkhan @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                            @Nyrryl-Cadiz @tombarrettillo - thank you! I signed with Bookends Literary!

                            https://www.menalkhan.com/
                            Connect with me → https://linktr.ee/menalkhan

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                            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @menalkhan last edited by

                              @menalkhan that is wonderful! all the best.

                              Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                              YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                              • Yogita Chawdhary
                                Yogita Chawdhary last edited by

                                Hi Menal, Love your art style! Your work would look super cute on PBs. Congratulations on getting an agent! All the best! 🙂

                                Yogita Chawdhary
                                Portfolio: https://www.yogitachawdhary.com/
                                Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/yogita_illustrations/

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                                • menalkhan
                                  menalkhan @Yogita Chawdhary last edited by

                                  @Yogita-Chawdhary Thanks so much, Yogita!! Your work is great too! 👏

                                  https://www.menalkhan.com/
                                  Connect with me → https://linktr.ee/menalkhan

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                                  • StudioHannah
                                    StudioHannah last edited by

                                    I'm kinda late to this post but I just wanted to say you have an excellent style and portfolio! Great work!

                                    www.studiohannah.com
                                    Social:
                                    www.instagram.com/studiohannahart
                                    www.facebook.com/studiohannahart
                                    www.YouTube.com/studiohannah

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