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    • NoWayMe
      NoWayMe last edited by

      Hello everyone!

      This week-end I had the chance to participate in the Spring Critique and have one of my illustration critiqued by @Lee-White and @Will-Terry. They had great suggestion to improve my piece, and I wanted to share the updates with you!

      First, here is the original

      0_1462415901657_Feb 2016 3rdThursday - Noemie Gionet Landry.jpg

      Here was their suggestions :
      − Get rid of at least 50 % of the animals in the background
      − Rework bushes (add detailed leaves, too fuzzy, not finished)
      − Add grass at transition light/dark
      − Shadows on Alfred too dark
      − Bush hiding mouse not high enough
      − Group mouse on the same side

      I made several of the changes. I am in the process of reworking the bushes (obviously not done) but I wanted to share it with you and see what you thought! If anyone has other comments, please go ahead!

      0_1462416162315_Alfred - 3rd Thursday - NGLandry crit.jpg

      noemiegionetlandry.squarespace.com
      noemie_illustration on Instagram

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        Dih @NoWayMe last edited by

        @NoWayMe I can see the subtle changes and it looks good 🙂

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