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    Third Thursday - Willie and Tod

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    • natiwata
      natiwata SVS OG @Kevin Longueil last edited by

      @Kevin-Longueil Chiiiiills. Your stuff is always so striking, beautifully done and tells a story. Turning out really nice!

      Nat Iwata
      www.iwataillustration.com

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      • Chris Perry
        Chris Perry @Kevin Longueil last edited by

        @Kevin-Longueil I think the story is clearer with the boat. going through some of the other comments I like the idea of having an oar in his hand (perhaps a hero prop) it connects the person with the boat. I feel it would work better if the oar was not between the person and death it stops the flow. I am undecided about having leaves on the tree or having a dead tree. I understand the death motif but it is more a story of hope so leaves would be ok. Play with the directional lines to move eye around image. Perhaps oar in hand leading eye to boat. Broken mast of boat leading to tree, tree arching over leading to figures. Hand of death leading to shipwrecked man. You get the picture. I would draw it out but am in a bit of a hurry this morning.

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        • Kevin Longueil
          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Camomilla last edited by

          @Camomilla Thank you Camomilla!
          @natiwata Thank you Nat!
          @Chris-Perry Thanks for the feedback Chris - you may be right about the oar - it may make a triumphal return in the final... still not sure about it - i'm glad you see it as a hopeful piece too - it is strange for it to be trying to be that but it is 🙂 i really appreciate your critique and value your input - but i most likely will stay with this composition at this point - i liked the boat too and it will make an appearance in a future illustration i'm sure - i think that even if i am not nailing the prompt, that this piece has some kind of life to it at the moment and i need to start refining the things i have left for last and let the piece stay what it has become.... if that makes sense - Thanks again Chris!

          Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
          https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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          • DavidJMacias
            DavidJMacias last edited by

            Thanks for the kind words. No problem, looking forward to your final!

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            • Kevin Longueil
              Kevin Longueil SVS OG last edited by Kevin Longueil

              Here is another little update - so much left to do but we are getting down to the wire - don't forget to submit before Wednesday at noon 🙂

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              Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
              https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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