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    • Lynn Larson
      Lynn Larson SVS OG last edited by

      Oooh! Flows so much better now! the audience definitely reads spectators now, and that change in the curve of the giraffe's neck really eases the eye along! I think the color is great, and the mice still make me laugh! Excellent job!

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      • Rich Green
        Rich Green SVS OG @Maile McCarthy last edited by

        @Maile-McCarthy this update is absolutely fantastic. I love the minimal markings for the audience. It reads perfectly without distracting the eye from the towering attraction. And it also really adds to the just how far up they are towering too. Love it!!!

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        • Vicky Vicky
          Vicky Vicky last edited by

          Hi Maile,

          Great revision. The giraffe looks a lot better and that curve really makes for a nice composition for the whole piece. To me, the ear still doesn't really have the shape of a giraffe's ear, those curvy lines wouldn't be there. I would just make it simpler and maybe make the little "antennae" thicker to be more giraffe-like. Not a big issue.

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          • Naroth Kean
            Naroth Kean last edited by

            Good luck! it has turned out very lovely. So much fun, I love those characters and their swag haha.

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            • J
              Jeszika Lee last edited by

              just peeked in on this thread - and the improvements you made are fantastic! You really refined this and brought it all together so well! And I am glad you stuck with this color scheme - it has a great design quality to it!

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              • Maile McCarthy
                Maile McCarthy @Vicky Vicky last edited by

                @Vicky-Vicky said:

                Hi Maile,

                Great revision. The giraffe looks a lot better and that curve really makes for a nice composition for the whole piece. To me, the ear still doesn't really have the shape of a giraffe's ear, those curvy lines wouldn't be there. I would just make it simpler and maybe make the little "antennae" thicker to be more giraffe-like. Not a big issue.

                Thanks Vicky. This kind of feedback is really helpful to me. It's a good reminder of how important it is to understand the anatomically correct way of drawing something before making an abstract departure. I didn't do that here, and I guess it shows!

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                • Maile McCarthy
                  Maile McCarthy @Naroth Kean last edited by

                  @Naroth-Cow said:

                  Good luck! it has turned out very lovely. So much fun, I love those characters and their swag haha.

                  Thank you 🙂

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                  www.mailemccarthyillustration.com

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                  • Lee White
                    Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                    Really nice! Love your color and design.

                    Only thing off for me is the character design of the giraffe. SInce he's gonna be a main focus, he needs to be perfect. IT's mainly his chin and ears that need work. The way they are now give him a sort of "dragon" look. I'd make the chin smaller/thinnner and look at some reference to do a stylized ear that is correct.

                    Great piece. I'd like to see more from this story. ; )

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                    • Maile McCarthy
                      Maile McCarthy @Lee White last edited by

                      @Lee-White Thanks Lee (and everyone). It's so helpful to have fresh eyes on my work.

                      Off to study giraffes...

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                      • Maile McCarthy
                        Maile McCarthy @Lee White last edited by

                        @Lee-White @Vicky-Vicky

                        Here it is with a giraffe-ier head. I'm wondering if I might have gone too far toward realism, so that the head doesn't seem to fit the body or the boy's face. What do you think?

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                        • Lynn Larson
                          Lynn Larson SVS OG last edited by

                          I think the new head is good! just darken the outlines on the spots to be consistent with the rest of him 🙂

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                          • Javier Diaz
                            Javier Diaz last edited by

                            It's looking good. I would just push the curve the people are on right now. Maybe make it a bit more twisty.
                            Just a quick paintover.
                            circuswip.jpg

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                            • Maile McCarthy
                              Maile McCarthy @Lynn Larson last edited by

                              @Lynn-Larson Thanks Lynn.

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                              • Maile McCarthy
                                Maile McCarthy @Javier Diaz last edited by

                                @Javier-Diaz Ooh thank you! I love the feel of your curve. I'm going to go work on this now and see how it goes.

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                                • Maile McCarthy
                                  Maile McCarthy @Maile McCarthy last edited by Maile McCarthy

                                  @Javier-Diaz Whew! Okay, here's the update. It was not easy for me to push things this much (and even looking at it now, I can see places where I could have pushed more, especially at the girl/cat section). But I think the result is quite an improvement over the original.

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                                  • Lynn Larson
                                    Lynn Larson SVS OG last edited by

                                    hehe, love it!!

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                                    • Maile McCarthy
                                      Maile McCarthy @Lynn Larson last edited by

                                      @Lynn-Larson Thanks 🙂

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                                      • Javier Diaz
                                        Javier Diaz @Maile McCarthy last edited by

                                        @Maile-McCarthy said:

                                        @Javier-Diaz Whew! Okay, here's the update. It was not easy for me to push things this much (and even looking at it now, I can see places where I could have pushed more, especially at the girl/cat section). But I think the result is quite an improvement over the original.

                                        upload-6a3ff808-4dda-4e89-9c1a-a367c9323c5b

                                        Awesome work!! 😃

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                                        • Thrace
                                          Thrace last edited by

                                          Such a big difference from where you started. I know you have to feel good about where it is now and all the great advice along the way!

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                                          • Maile McCarthy
                                            Maile McCarthy @Javier Diaz last edited by

                                            @Javier-Diaz Thank you 🙂

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