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    • Naroth Kean
      Naroth Kean last edited by

      "Today I bike"
      Hi everyone! I was having hard time trying to draw that bike, and when I eventually did it feels like the bike is so stiff. Should I some an action lines? It would be awesome if I can get a little feedback on how to give it a bit more movement. Thank you0_1473747806976_I-bike-too.jpg

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      • Kevin Longueil
        Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Naroth Kean last edited by

        @Naroth-Kean Hey Naroth awesome piece! I'll give my quick thought as to what is different about the bike - everything else in the piece seems to have been painted with a different edge quality - I think everything else has a smoother edge - the bike has a hesitating edge if that makes sense - maybe use quick single strokes to define each part of the bike - I don't think confident is the right word but I'll use it for want of a better one - the fish and the mermaid and the town all seem made by quick perfectly placed confident paint strokes - the bike seems not to have the loose perfection that the rest of the piece has - still looks awesome to me though 🙂

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        • ThomasHay
          ThomasHay last edited by

          @Naroth-Kean Hi, nice image. Maybe you could try something like this to get some movement in the bike. 🙂

          0_1473769467183_1473747807781-i-bike-too.jpg

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          • evilrobot
            evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

            I think you've already got some good suggestions here. I might also add a quick line in the sand from the back tire going back to show the path in the sand the bike has already taken. Then maybe have one of the fish overlap the bike a bit, and have the bike over lap one of fish.

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            • Lydia M
              Lydia M last edited by

              Beautiful and funny! I agree with Kevin about the line quality. You could also tip the bike back towards her so it's slightly up on one wheel.

              0_1473777465901_i-bike-too.jpg

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              • Naroth Kean
                Naroth Kean @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                @Kevin-Longueil Thanks a lot Kevin! I do agree that the bike is heavy handed as now it is competing with the girl as well. I'll go and try the single strokes you suggested. Thanks again

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                • Naroth Kean
                  Naroth Kean @ThomasHay last edited by

                  @ThomasHay Ohhhh that is very nice tip there! I love the movement inside the wheel and the sand dusting and splashing out from the wheels! Thank you so much! I'll go do something with it.

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                  • Naroth Kean
                    Naroth Kean @evilrobot last edited by

                    @evilrobot I really like the sand track and fish overlapping idea, and I think it makes more sense too. Thank you for the great suggestion!

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                    • Naroth Kean
                      Naroth Kean @Lydia M last edited by

                      @Lydia-M Ahaha I love that! it's even more funny. Thank you!

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                      • Lee Holland
                        Lee Holland last edited by

                        Some great suggestions from every one. I found this ref which may help too.0_1473838770518_bike.jpg

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