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    • Maile McCarthy
      Maile McCarthy @Sarah LuAnn last edited by

      @Sarah-LuAnn I like the cloud texture better than the flat sky, but I think it needs to be refined. I'm not sure how... maybe bigger swooshes? Or group the marks into more discernible clumps, like you have below the sail?

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      • Carey Bowden
        Carey Bowden @Maile McCarthy last edited by

        This is a fantastic piece! I agree with @Maile-McCarthy about the clouds... some sort of stormy texture in the sky, or even a slight value change (like, lighter at the top, darker near the horizon) otherwise the sky almost "sticks out" as being the only flat surface...

        Is the figure tied to the mast? Like Odysseus?? 😃

        I love your work! Keep it up, can't wait to see the final!

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        • SarahLuAnn
          SarahLuAnn last edited by

          Hey, this is me, but I isn't letting me log in through my facebook anymore so I got fed up and made a new account. Thanks for the feedback guys, I think you're right--I'll see about improving the cloud texture and post the finished piece here when I'm done.

          Yes, the figure is tied to the mast. Like Odysseus, except there aren't any sirens ;-).

          sarahluann.com

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            A Former User last edited by

            LOL Sarah's got the same problem as me. But hey your image is stunning I really love how you handle the waves!!! Great job

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            • SarahLuAnn
              SarahLuAnn last edited by

              OK, here is my second try with the cloud texture. I grouped the shapes more, so there are places with more and less texture. Better, worse?
              Nephi2.jpg

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              • AndrewCothill
                AndrewCothill last edited by

                I absolutely adore this! Just how fluid, simple and beautiful it is is...is, well, it's stunning is what it is!

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                • Rob Smith
                  Rob Smith last edited by

                  Really great line work and technique! I like the clouds better in this last version. Some of your other sketches were great as well. I would explore some of those options as well.

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                  • Steve Young
                    Steve Young last edited by

                    This is looking really good, I would highlight the waves a little, and add some shadow to them as well, so they pop.

                    Never give up, always push yourself two steps further than you believe you can go.

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                    • Maile McCarthy
                      Maile McCarthy @SarahLuAnn last edited by

                      @SarahLuAnn I keep flipping back and forth between the old and new images. It's so hard to decide, but I think I prefer the newer version with the grouped clouds.

                      Twitter @MaileMcCarthy
                      www.mailemccarthyillustration.com

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                      • Jason Goss
                        Jason Goss last edited by

                        Love the work, that texture is so satisfying, the only comment I would make is in regards to the way the sail passes through the man tied to the mast, it appears to be a part of him. It feels like a tangent... maybe you could attach the sail to the mast? That way the sail still carries the eye down to the man? Beautiful work either way!

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                        • Ben J Hutchison
                          Ben J Hutchison last edited by

                          have you ever checked out Yuko Shimizu's work? She was what I first thought of when I saw this. BTW, what portions are by hand and what are digital or is it all digital? I do think the clouds add something but at the same time everything else on the page is lined in black. The sky does need something....

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                          • Naroth Kean
                            Naroth Kean last edited by

                            This has turn out so nice I always admire people who can awesome line work because I suck at it.

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                            • Sarah LuAnn
                              Sarah LuAnn SVS OG last edited by

                              I am familiar with Yuko Shimizu's work, I follow her on tumblr. I'm flattered that this reminded you of her work!

                              I go back and forth a lot between digital and physical--I don't have a cintiq, just a tablet, so the actual drawing parts are easier for me with pencil and paper. So my process starts with thumbnails on paper, I scan those and enlarge my favorite thumbnail, print that out, draw in more details, scan that in, make any needed fixes, print a pale version which I ink over, I scan THAT in, put the scanned inked drawing into illustrator, and then I do the full colored detailed version there. So ultimately the final piece is all in vector, which is really nice for re-sizing and such 🙂 And I end up with a lot of physical printed-then-drawn-over versions of the picture, which I just stick in a box, for lack of anything better to do with them.

                              As far as line work goes, I was terrible at it not so long ago and I'm still trying to get better. A brush pen helped me a lot to vary my lines and give them a more natural flow.

                              sarahluann.com

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                              • Rich Green
                                Rich Green SVS OG last edited by

                                I really love how this piece turned out @sarah-luann! The moody blue really catches my eye. And all of the detailed line work in the waves is stunning. I think your process is really working for you so keep up the great work!

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                                • Thrace
                                  Thrace last edited by

                                  This piece is just beautiful, great job!

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                                  • Sarah LuAnn
                                    Sarah LuAnn SVS OG last edited by

                                    Thanks! I wasn't entirely satisfied with the clouds in that last version, so I made a few little changes and called it done. This is the final version:
                                    Screen Shot 2015-09-03 at 8.54.39 AM.png

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                                    • Maile McCarthy
                                      Maile McCarthy @Sarah LuAnn last edited by

                                      @Sarah-LuAnn I love how this turned out! I think it was worth all that trial and error with the clouds: not too busy, not too flat. It's amazing that you can create a sense of clouds receding into the background with just line.

                                      Twitter @MaileMcCarthy
                                      www.mailemccarthyillustration.com

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                                      • Steve Young
                                        Steve Young last edited by

                                        Well done, pat on the back!

                                        Never give up, always push yourself two steps further than you believe you can go.

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                                        • Naroth Kean
                                          Naroth Kean last edited by

                                          very nicely executed!

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                                          • Fabienne
                                            Fabienne @Sarah LuAnn last edited by

                                            @Sarah-LuAnn Just have to say: Excellent! I love the the impression from linocut prints.

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