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      RajSolankiArt @Jason Bowen last edited by

      @jason-bowen that's great! Ya I'll definitely try to slow down next time around!

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        RajSolankiArt @Jose Ramos last edited by

        @jose-ramos ya I think you're right about the emptiness on the right side! And my wheels could use some work! Thanks!

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          RajSolankiArt @TessaW last edited by

          @tessw just recently bought some watercolor material, so I definitely need to try that out! I agree with the wheels needing some work! Thanks!

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            WithLinesOfInk last edited by

            This is so cool, I love the color choices and the energy. The marker texture doesn't both me that much but that's just a personal thing. I do think that the car suffers from a few problematic tangents. The wheels are uncomfortably close to the horizon and the top just kisses those clouds and it feels uncomfortable. I think the proximity to the horizon line is also messing with perspective- it makes the car look HUGE. My suggestion would be to move it up farther and to the right a bit so it's overlapping the clouds and not dead center on the page (which gives it a very sturdy, placid feel instead of a dynamic moving action feel). You might play with the angle the car is titled at, the scale and maybe up the saturation a bit? I did a quick mock-up, just playing around.

            That's my two cents!

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              MOO SVS OG @WithLinesOfInk last edited by

              @withlinesofink That was a good fix. I think he's doing great as I am also practicing perspective but th ecar felt funny to me. I didn't think I knew what I was talking about but your post made me feel better 🙂 I just didn't necessarily know the solution. Thanks!

              Marsha Ottum Owen

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                MOO SVS OG last edited by

                I'm doing the perspective exercises too. This looks really good! I need to try some drawings like this to practice. Thanks for sharing!

                Marsha Ottum Owen

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                  WithLinesOfInk @RajSolankiArt last edited by

                  @rajsolankiart Working on a smoother surface can help. I like using vellum for markers because it takes just a little bit longer to dry so you can blend a bit more.

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                    RajSolankiArt @WithLinesOfInk last edited by

                    @withlinesofink this is amazing direction! Thanks so much! I didn't notice the tangents until you mentioned them, then they stuck out like a sore thumb haha!

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                      RajSolankiArt @MOO last edited by

                      @marsha-kay-ottum-owen thanks! It's definitely been a process! my sketchbook is starting to get full of perspective practice

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                        TessaW @WithLinesOfInk last edited by

                        @withlinesofink That's a really good solution!

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