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    WIP- Critiques Wanted please

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    • MOO
      MOO SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by MOO

      @nyrryl-cadiz 🙂 I like feet.

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      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @MOO last edited by

        @marsha-kay-ottum-owen haha 🙂 I'll think about it.

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        • RHirsch
          RHirsch @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

          @nyrryl-cadiz I think if you crop it or frame it he won't need feet. Love a good dragon myself, and I like that she's giving raspberries to the knight. Good poses, and I also like the negative space around the sword.

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          • MOO
            MOO SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

            @nyrryl-cadiz Really, I think it looks fine without feet. I was just looking at the bottom of the page and wondering why it wasn't finished 🙂

            Marsha Ottum Owen

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            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @MOO last edited by

              @marsha-kay-ottum-owen The paper was bigger than the illustration. 😃

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              • NizhoniWolf
                NizhoniWolf @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                @nyrryl-cadiz said in WIP- Critiques Wanted please:

                @demotlj Thanks for the critique! The princess is actually the rider. She's the more fearless one in this situation. I imagine her as some sort of damsel in distress who got tired of waiting and defeated the dragon who was guarding her tower. Now as her knight has arrived, we can see that she no longer needs his help.

                I LOVE that idea! (and i love her face lol) If it was me, i'd draw the knight a little more ...defeated? (is that the right word?) with a " aww maaann" slump to his shoulders (and his sword arm relaxed).

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                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                  Hi, guys! Sorry for the long wait but here's an update on my illustration. I've finished coloring the background, the dragon, and the princess. I must say I'm very satisfied with how they turned out but, I must admit, I'm having trouble with my knight. I don't know what color to use. Any suggestions? Thanks. Any input is highly appreciated.

                  0_1518891271561_1 knight and dragon.jpg

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                  • evilrobot
                    evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                    This is looking really fantastic. Love the princess really nice rendering job!

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                    • rcartwright
                      rcartwright last edited by

                      I would consider a lighter value on the helmet as it is very close in value to the green hill area and it disappears into it.

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                      • Johanna Kim
                        Johanna Kim SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                        @nyrryl-cadiz This is beautiful! For the knight, his green tunic and sword hilt needs to move a bit further into the foreground. You can do that by coloring the hilt a dark color and adding a transparent dark tone (i.e., shadow) to his entire form, but maybe have a bit of his left edge showing some light coming around his form.

                        Also, I'm a bit confused about where the light is coming from. It seems to be a spotlight, and I see the dragon's shadow, but nothing for the knight.

                        Lastly, there's a tangent where the sword touches the dragon's claw. You can either tuck the dragon's foot further behind the sword, or move the angle of the sword. This, of course, can be done in Photoshop.

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                        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Johanna Kim last edited by

                          @johanna-kim Hi! Thanks for the comment. Yeah, the knight is still not finished. I'll be sure to apply what you said. 🙂

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                          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @evilrobot last edited by

                            @evilrobot Thank you. I'm glad you like it.

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                            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                              Here's an update. I've finally colored my knight character, adjusted the sword and added shadow. Any critiques?
                              0_1518971005506_1 knight and dragon.jpg

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                              • Chip Valecek
                                Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                                @nyrryl-cadiz Looking really good. I would maybe push the shadows a little more. Mainly your occlusion shadows.


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                                • K
                                  Kat SVS OG last edited by

                                  Great piece! I love the princess' attitude 🙂 I think the dragon needs a nice big shadow. He'd certainly cast a large one, and maybe that might help place him more firmly on the ground.

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                                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Kat last edited by

                                    @kat Yeah, I think so too. I haven't finished that part yet. Thanks for the comment.

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                                    • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Chip Valecek last edited by

                                      @chip-valecek Thanks for the input!

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                                      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

                                        Hi, everybody!
                                        Sorry for the long wait but here's my revised piece. I made the knight's shadow darker. I added the dragon's cast shadow and emphasize its scales by adding highlight. I hope you guys like it!

                                        0_1519406250700_1 knight and dragon.jpg

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