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    • RHirsch
      RHirsch last edited by

      So, I have no street scenes in my portfolio, and I've had the idea for this piece in my head for some time. The Travel prompt seemed to be a good fit. Still very loose, but I'm throwing on here for your perusal. The idea is Santa on vacation with his reindeer, he's driving them through a Japanese street market on a rickshaw. Thoughts, comments, critiques, and suggestions welcome.0_1524179799521_travel6.jpg

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      • artwithashley
        artwithashley @RHirsch last edited by

        @rhirsch bwahhaha!! I love this so much. I can't wait to see it finished.

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        • Gary Wilkinson
          Gary Wilkinson last edited by

          Nice concept and excited to see it develop 😃 Btw be careful of your ellipses on the bike

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          • RHirsch
            RHirsch @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

            @gary-wilkinson I want it to look like it's moving - do you think they're too tight? Should I round them out a bit more?

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            • Margarita Levina
              Margarita Levina last edited by

              Really nice idea!)) And the sketch is good too)

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              • Jason Bowen
                Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

                Looks great.

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                • Gary Wilkinson
                  Gary Wilkinson @RHirsch last edited by

                  @rhirsch well the front wheel makes the bike look like its leaning to the left a lot, but the handlebars are stable. The major axis of an ellipse should conform to the perspective of the scene. The back wheels can be seen as bending, but that could just be the style of the bike. You can make it seem like it's moving by adding blur later

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                  • juliepeelart
                    juliepeelart SVS OG last edited by

                    So funny! I love this idea and can't wait to see the final!

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                    • Kevin Longueil
                      Kevin Longueil SVS OG @RHirsch last edited by

                      @rhirsch I really like the story of this image! For feedback the thing that pops up for me is possibly variety of sizes in your shapes ....this is most likely a non-issue but for some reason I feel like increasing the size of the rear wheel by a lot would resolve it for me - feel free to ignore - really nice drawing!

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                      • Miriam
                        Miriam last edited by

                        I like the concept & sketch. I'm liking the style so far and it has a nice children's book or greeting card look, which goes perfectly with the idea.

                        With it set in Japan, I would suggest making it much more compact & crowded. This looks like comfortably wide streets / walkways, and you can't see any buildings. Asian markets make me think of a crowded, chaotic, exciting environment. But I am not an expert on this subject!

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                        • RHirsch
                          RHirsch @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                          @gary-wilkinson Agreed. I fixed the perspective on them, I'll post an updated sketch tonight or tomorrow.

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                          • RHirsch
                            RHirsch @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                            @kevin-longueil You know, I was looking at that earlier and then went to look at my reference photos and I see it both ways - wheels all the same size, wheels bigger in the back. I will play around with it, thanks for the suggestion.

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                            • RHirsch
                              RHirsch @Miriam last edited by

                              @miriam My favorite reference photo would agree with you. I am still playing with the foreground - I want it crowded but not overlapping the rickshaw or drawing too much focus. I am also playing with background characters so I left some room for them - I don't think the market will pull off crowded without other people. Thanks!

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                              • Miriam
                                Miriam @RHirsch last edited by

                                @rhirsch
                                Maybe you could try some indistinct / blurry crowds in the background? (Like a selective-focus shot if it was a photo).

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                                • RHirsch
                                  RHirsch last edited by

                                  Inked. Some touch ups and tweaks, but ready for some value and color studies.
                                  0_1524542831972_travel8.jpg

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                                  • RHirsch
                                    RHirsch last edited by

                                    Almost done. A bit of cleanup and some fresh eyes on it tomorrow and I'll submit. If anyone sees anything glaring, feel free to comment. It's possible to miss things when you've stared at a piece too long.
                                    0_1524980646282_travel10.jpg

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