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      Taru last edited by

      Hi! I'm currently working on a long-term project concerning a children's book about goats. Someone else is writing the text (little rhymes about all kinds of goats, in Dutch) and I'm doing the illustrations.
      However, this is my first time illustrating a book and I'm having a hard time with the compositions. There are some things that need to be in the illustration, but I can't seem to fit it all in there and still keep it a kind of clean composition (because that's what we're going for).

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      Here you see the first composition I did. I felt it was a bit too static. So I did another one (see below).

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      I like the character, but the composition is terrible in both in my opinion. I feel like I've learned a lot during the SVS classes, but I can't seem to put it to practise.

      Do you have some advice for me to make these sketches more lively and attractive composition-wise? I've been at these for weeks but I can't seem to figure it out!

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        djlambson last edited by

        Its going to be adorable. You might try different viewpoints.. rather than these straight on sort of staged images you might add some interest just by jutting a wall in there and adding some side views of things. I don't know if I'm being clear really, but I think its Will Terry who talks about this more in depth in one of his classes..I think it could have been the 100 things class. I love your character!

        https://www.instagram.com/deborahlambson_art/
        https://deborahlambson.com/folio

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          A Former User @Taru last edited by A Former User

          @taru I think it's really nice, I prefer the top image. I think you have a few issues, for one I find the scratchy lines under the chair and table distracting, but you do need to have them grounded in the space, so they are not floating, maybe using a darker shadow rather than black lines would clean it up. They also don't seem to be on the same plane. There are a few tangents as well, I think you could lose the flags, they run right into the animals head. I love the animals attitude, you could play that up and maybe cross her legs. Great stuff. Chris
          Hope you are not offended, I dropped your jpg. in photoshop and tried out some of the suggestions, only suggestions!
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