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      A Former User last edited by

      I like how you've worked through this image, seems like you've learned a lot in a short time. While I agree with some of the other crits that have helped this piece I think what got lost was the Music element. The band is almost non existent at this point because the values are so dark. Maybe you could add a Jukebox in the foreground since the focus is on the 2 guys sitting at the bar if you want to keep the music idea. Or just focus on making a cool illustration of guys at a bar, its a fun scene, but I don't get Music from it.

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      • kylebeaudette
        kylebeaudette @Guest last edited by

        @shiggins180 yeah, I agree. I had originally wanted the creature flying across the room into a jukebox that was all lit up, casting light onto his behind. This last touch up last night was no good. I'll revert back to the save right before, and beef up that band from a two piece to another couple of musicians, and light them like their show required a cover price.

        On a seperate note, I had done a google image search for 'bar' to get some good layout ideas for a background. I found a great one, and traced it in a matter of like, 5 minutes. I went back and changed it a bit, but it's essentially a trace.
        Initially, I was thinking 'oh I can't keep an element I traced in here..' but now I dont care at all, and can see myself pasting various background scenes together and tracing them in the future. I usually just don't do a background. I hope I eventually learn the language of architecture through absolutely cheating my backgrounds for a while😅

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        • kylebeaudette
          kylebeaudette last edited by

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          Well, some more. Reverted some stuff, changed some others. There's so many layers now it's kind of a nightmare to work on...

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            kylebeaudette last edited by

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            Maybe this instead

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            • kaitlinmakes
              kaitlinmakes last edited by

              Ive really been enjoying watching this build up - it also reminds me of a more fine art approach to making an image, and has a really wonderful grundgy feel to it.
              With all the activity, it also reads well, and I am having a lot of fun going through the image and discovering all of your creatures.
              My only thought is your flying guy - his toes are creating the most perfect tangent with the pole behind him.

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              • chrisaakins
                chrisaakins @kylebeaudette last edited by

                @kylebeaudette wow this is looking great! I feel your pain, though. Layers! But don't give up. The picture is looking really good.

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                • TessaW
                  TessaW last edited by TessaW

                  That elephant illustration is so great!

                  As for your side note about backgrounds: I think it's ok to trace at first to get your images done. Especially in the beginning when you're trying to get a hang of your medium and other elements. I will say though that once you get the hang of perspective and constructing things out of simple forms, you'll be able to do whatever background you want without tracing. Reference will then become more of an inspiration source to gather ideas, as well as fill in details on your base you've established. Instead of finding bar reference and tracing over it, you could find the bar reference, draw it from any angle or perspective you want, and use the reference to fill in the details. You'll get there eventually with some time and study.

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                  • TessaW
                    TessaW last edited by TessaW

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                    And if you wanted to make your piece more about music, perhaps if you gave less emphasis to the foreground area and more emphasis to the general bar area, it would help sell the idea better.

                    Here's a super rough paintover to show how you could demphasize the foreground (again with less value contrast). You'd probably need to bring up the contrast of the background more though!

                    Just a thought.

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                    • kylebeaudette
                      kylebeaudette last edited by

                      @TessaW
                      Gaah, soo much better!! I love how the squidman is sad too 🙂
                      Alas, it is far too late. There are 35 layers on this sucker, and many of them accidentally contain elements that should be on a lower layer and so forth. I've spent too much time on it as is, as some point you have to just move on. I like cropping the bar out, though! I'll definitely do that when I hand it in.
                      You've been super helpful 😃

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                      • TessaW
                        TessaW @kylebeaudette last edited by

                        @kylebeaudette Yeah, I agree, sometimes you just have to call it good! I hope I helped somewhat and didn't screw you up too much. All said and done, you still make compelling images. Keep up the good work.

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                        • KathrynAdebayo
                          KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                          Just want to throw in a word of encouragement for utilizing this critique with such a posture of learning and determination. Your image is excellent, and I think it has become even better thanks to the work you've put in.

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                          • Whitney Simms
                            Whitney Simms SVS OG last edited by

                            @kylebeaudette It was great to see the image evolve. You're doing great!

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