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    • Gary Wilkinson
      Gary Wilkinson last edited by

      Late to the crit, but I really like this piece and there isn't a lot I can offer in terms of adjustment, a couple of things I wanted to mention though were:

      The hanging picture of the music note seems as though there could be a better option for what could go into the frame. Perhaps that side doesn't even need a picture or it could be moved slightly to the upper right as to not be as prominent.

      Also, something slightly bothers me about the foreshortening of the trombone and it's position in space.

      I think it's a great piece though and excited to see the colors added to it. I'm guessing you use a multiply layer to add the colors, but what do you use to bring the lights back out? Overlay or normal?

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      • Jabbernewt
        Jabbernewt last edited by Jabbernewt

        Loving the values, textures, and general comp, but I've noticed something about the trombone. It seems to be looped around his neck. By this I mean that, even if his neck is hidden by the shoulder, the tube of the trombone seems to snake its way around the right side and end up on the left side, which is not how the trombone is held. This might be fixed by overlapping the chin over the tubing, or by illustrating a little portion of his neck between the shoulder and head. Other than that, I remember loving the smaller details in the piece when I viewed it a few days ago. The little family photo especially, because it shows that the kid is usually pretty tame, with huge hair that covers his eyes and forehead; I just love the contrast between the photo representation of the kid and the craziness of the kid's trombone blast.

        Also, the mouse-- what a phenomenal little detail! I love the humor!

        Pax

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        • braden H
          braden H last edited by

          Thank you all for the feedback! I tried to incorporate it as much as I could.

          @Gary-Wilkinson that darn treble clef picture does look out of place, doesn't it? I may do as you suggest later on and try and move it a little to make it a little less prominent.

          @Jabbernewt Arggh! You're right! And I looked at so much tromboney reference, too! That may need some surgery once I've got all the colour set in...

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          • braden H
            braden H last edited by

            Work continues! Time for the thing I need to work at most, colour! Gosh I hate colour... Hence why I now do everything in colour.

            Rough lighting colour study thingy

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            Rough colour

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            Aaaaaaaand colour WIP. Working from the background to the foreground. Almost finished working on the kid. Next come the animals.

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            • braden H
              braden H last edited by

              @Gary-Wilkinson

              As for colouring process, right now I use an overlay layer to throw in some light and a colourize layer for the local colour (I'm using painter. Photoshop I think has a 'colour' layer but it works a little different) Then I use a normal layer and just paint with the linework on a multiply layer overtop. Once I'm alllllmost done I'll flatten the linework and paint some highlights and stuff.

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              • kaitlinmakes
                kaitlinmakes last edited by

                Absolutely brilliant to show the light through the sheet music! I'm really enjoying watching this piece come together:)

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                • chrisaakins
                  chrisaakins last edited by

                  Love this. You really captured my struggles in 6th grade. You might want to lighten the value of the critter on the left. He is kinda hard to see. Unless it was intentional. I too think the lighting is amazing. Great job.

                  Chris Akins
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                  • Eric Castleman
                    Eric Castleman last edited by

                    Love it.

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                    • ?
                      A Former User last edited by

                      Really awesome to see you’re whole process! I agree about the dog being too dark. I know you don’t want it to be too light to pull focus from the main subject but it’s really hard to tell what’s happening in that corner and is a little distracting. Awesome work, really like your style

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                      • Eli
                        Eli @braden H last edited by

                        @art-of-b MAN, this is good! The dog is SO funny--I agree with making it lighter because it kind of gets lost. I love the chaotic composition and the crazy movement and flow of the whole thing. So many great and hilarious little details. Well done!

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                        • rachy
                          rachy @braden H last edited by

                          @art-of-b Love it! It's looking great! 😃

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                          • braden H
                            braden H last edited by

                            Work progresses!

                            Thank you all for the comments. The dog indeed was too dark as I was working from the background to the foreground and hadn't yet gotten to him.

                            He may, however, STILL be too dark XD

                            I've flattened the linework now, so it's just painting from here on out.

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                            • cam.royce
                              cam.royce @braden H last edited by

                              As someone who's learned an instrument, this totally makes me smile! haha

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                              • braden H
                                braden H last edited by

                                Work progresses. And progresses... And progresses...

                                That last 20% is a friggin' killer.

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                                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                                  I love love love this one! There’s one thing i think you can work on though and it’s the little doggie at the lower left side. He just looks so dark and hard to make out. Overall, i love you work!

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                                  • braden H
                                    braden H @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                                    @nyrrylcadiz

                                    He DOES still look super dark, yeah. I'll play with brightening him up a bit.

                                    Maybe a cooler colour than the many browns will help him pop without taking attention away from the trumpet.

                                    Blue dogs are a thing, right?

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                                    • Chip Valecek
                                      Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @braden H last edited by

                                      @art-of-b Of course blue dogs are real, did you ever see Blues Clues?


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                                      • nasvikdraws
                                        nasvikdraws last edited by

                                        Looks great. The celery in mom's ears are a bit too green. I'd either add that green somewhere else too or tone it down. Love the mouse with the headphones 😃

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                                        • chrisaakins
                                          chrisaakins @braden H last edited by

                                          @art-of-b you could repeat the grey in the wall art.

                                          Chris Akins
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                                          • braden H
                                            braden H last edited by

                                            @nasvikdraws I may tone down the green of the celery, yeah. I do want them to pop a little, though. I'll fiddle with it 🙂

                                            @chrisaakins Thanks for the suggestion! I wouldn't have thought of repeating colours. I'll try that for sure. I'm still internalizing the videos on colour and light and picking colour and stuff. I've got a looooooooot to learn.

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