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    APRIL CONTEST VIDEO CRITIQUES!

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    • Eli
      Eli last edited by

      On the old west one in the 3rd video, I thought the guy with the gun was getting ready to shoot the rope. That's why the guy about to be hanged doesn't look too worried...? Like in "The Good, the Bad and the Ugly." ?

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      • Susan Marks
        Susan Marks @Lee White last edited by

        @Lee-White This is the best gift yet. I am learning so much by listening to your feedback as you review a piece. And you do it so professionally and kind and direct-all in one.

        For "a six year old in a middle aged body"-thumbs up.

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        • KathrynAdebayo
          KathrynAdebayo last edited by

          Here’s a bit of an update with the red ball moved so that it’s in front of the blanket. It seems to me more noticeable now, though I’d love anyone’s feedback. Thanks again, Lee.

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          • bnewman
            bnewman last edited by

            @Lee-White Thanks very much for the feedback! I really like your advice on how to load the moment even more -- I wish I'd thought of that! Now I have to admit I was dreading the moment before watching your critique of my work. I've been trying to illustrate without line which has been a bit of a struggle to say the least and I thought my finished piece lost something between sketch and final (and was generally poor overall). Thanks for all your critiques, these are so incredibly valuable.

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            • ArtofAleksey
              ArtofAleksey last edited by

              @Lee-White ok I made the changes. I think I’m actually going to submit this to this months SCBWI “alone” prompt.
              Thank you again.
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              instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
              alekseyillustration.com

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              • justjax
                justjax last edited by

                @Lee-White Thanks so much for doing this. I have learnt loads listening to all the other critiques, not just mine. And I'm pleased you suggested leaving out the dog under the plant from mine - I added him at the last minute as I felt something was missing. Adding other subtle characters above and in the background, as you suggested, would help fill that 'missing' feeling. Thank you!

                https://www.instagram.com/jacquimulvagh/

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                • Lee White
                  Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                  @Aleksey If teeth are the weapon, then you need to lean into them a little more. Looking good though!

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                  SVS Faculty Instructor
                  www.leewhiteillustration.com

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                  • ArtofAleksey
                    ArtofAleksey @Lee White last edited by

                    @Lee-White oh dang. Yeah i guess I could have exaggerated more. You don’t think it would have been a bit too much for a picture book portfolio. Like i know the big bad wolf is a well know scary villian in picture books but what do you think?

                    instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                    alekseyillustration.com

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                    • Lee White
                      Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                      @Aleksey I think this level of "scary" is fine for kids books for the most part. If it's a book for 2 year olds, you would need to back off, but if it's for 5-7 year olds, you have more freedom there

                      SVS Faculty Instructor
                      www.leewhiteillustration.com

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                      • ArtofAleksey
                        ArtofAleksey @Lee White last edited by

                        @Lee-White i had no idea.. thank you. Like that fox even frightens me right now.

                        instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                        alekseyillustration.com

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                        • Lee White
                          Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG @ArtofAleksey last edited by Lee White

                          @Aleksey Pay attention to that feeling. All we really want is for our audience to feel something. ANY solid feeling one way or the other is great. Our worst enemy is the bland middle ground. If we make a sad image, we need to really convey how sad it is. Likewise when we make a happy image. Or scary, or mad, or whatever. Most illustrators are stuck in the middle ground of not conveying enough emotion and feeling. That is much worse than going a little too far. With most of my students I encourage going WAY to far, then we can dial it back if needed. But most of the time when they think it's way too far, it's actually just getting to the spot where it's been pushed far enough.

                          SVS Faculty Instructor
                          www.leewhiteillustration.com

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                          • ArtofAleksey
                            ArtofAleksey last edited by ArtofAleksey

                            @Lee-White I see, so go further to communicate that feeling better. And if needed, you can dial it back.

                            instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                            alekseyillustration.com

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                            • Lisa Middleton Griffin
                              Lisa Middleton Griffin last edited by

                              I am just getting caught up with this but loved that you took the time to do it. A great way to listen and learn... pointers that can be great reminders for illustrators at all stages.

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