Superstition WIP
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Looking great, but do you think the lines around wolf's stomach is a bit naff... maybe too much visual exposition? I personally think it's better without them, but your choice. His expression is great
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@Amanda-Jean I am torn about the lines, also around little red, should I remove those? Is it to much? I wanted to show some sort of action with it.
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@Chip-Valecek could you have the wolf’s leg up as if ready to lunge forward and his body leaning a bit backward in oppositional motion?
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@Chip-Valecek I thought the ones around Red were fine, although I might play with shape/colour of them. If it's movement you're trying to emphasise (that is reacting to several thousand volts travelling through her bones), try following the contours of her silhouette as opposed to the electricity maybe?!
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Here is my final pass and with text. What do you think about the text? How about the treatment of the text?
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or this one without the purple lines of shock
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@Chip-Valecek You have a typo “lighting” where I assume you meant lightening. It looks great though.
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@Chip-Valecek I like the one without lines of shock
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@BichonBistro i agree, i like it better without.
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I kinda wanna see her teeth. For some reason seeing skeleton bits like ribs and eye sockets but no teeth is unnerving to me
Wolf's not even gonna have to cook her :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_closed_eyes:
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@Chip-Valecek the second one is what I'd go with. Not so sure about the font choice myself, but I guess I'm a bit of a traditionalist and would choose a simple serif font. I also feel it's a bit too close to the edge of the frame. You have more space down in the bottom right. What do you think about getting the reader to view the picture then read the text instead of vice versa? Or even breaking the sentences up? One top left, one bottom right.
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I like the second one, too, and I also like the idea of breaking the sentences up. I like that you can see the texture more without the shock lines and I personally think the texture is more visually interesting. Nice work!
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Thank you everyone for the feed back. I updated the text and added some eyes into the tree. I meant to do that before but forgot.
